Hello everyone I remove the song of the last scene cause I get copyright so next I will make sure to choose a correct song so that you guys can enjoy the video
I counted 26 mistakes (In your massages, as well as the characters do not behave at all the way they would have behaved in the original, even if we take the fact that this is a fanon story, their behavior differs too much, also Shinobu saying something about Giyu's family and his sister, this is a huge mistake, simply because her family and sister also died, she would never have said this under any circumstances, and of course Giyu who is angry at the words of Obanai and Sanemi is just nonsense, he would just left or would have said “I’m fine with it”. For the first texting story this is 2/10, you could have thought better about how to play out the events in this story, or not take the idea from other people at all.)
@@user-mz8hp3vm6s well im jus a newbie bro i don't have that much experience but i will try to do better and about the story i created it so i want to put alot changes different from cannon
@@Shadowsan396 Bro no offense, but the fact that you are a newbie doesn’t mean anything, when I created my first text story (Also Giyushino), I took into account every little detail and character of the characters in principle (I didn’t post this story on TH-cam, but I don’t deny that I have there were mistakes, but after a while I found them and corrected them until I got a very good story, and although I haven’t finished it yet (because I have no motivation), I can already say that it was better than yours, I’m just saying this because even if you are a beginner, you can still create good stories, for example: practice first, look at other text stories and comments under them, choose your favorite one for yourself and then create a good story from scratch, and even if you have no ideas, you can always take a little ideas from someone for each story, and this way you will definitely be able to create something good, but sometimes if you'll think about what you want to write it will be more helpful to you in the future.)
@@Shadowsan396 yeah i don't know English very well too, i was using translator lol💀, but i don't know what language do you know so I'm writing this to you in English (This time I don't used translator)
I just love how they (muichiro and tengen and sanemi and rengoku) spelt S I M P because thats iguro for you😂
Bro hit him menacingly
Iike he had blacked flashed him
Bro may I ask how did you inserted the background image and music?
@@blueocean512u can use background image from the plus(+) button where once u see the type line on the left side
@@blueocean512 and music I just edit it by using others music
@@Shadowsan396 Thanks a lot bro. This helped me a lot
@Rabbi-bb2vx welcome✌
Hello everyone I remove the song of the last scene cause I get copyright so next I will make sure to choose a correct song so that you guys can enjoy the video
Part 2 asap
@@Bacaryy wait for tomorrow
I counted 26 mistakes (In your massages, as well as the characters do not behave at all the way they would have behaved in the original, even if we take the fact that this is a fanon story, their behavior differs too much, also Shinobu saying something about Giyu's family and his sister, this is a huge mistake, simply because her family and sister also died, she would never have said this under any circumstances, and of course Giyu who is angry at the words of Obanai and Sanemi is just nonsense, he would just left or would have said “I’m fine with it”. For the first texting story this is 2/10, you could have thought better about how to play out the events in this story, or not take the idea from other people at all.)
@@user-mz8hp3vm6s well im jus a newbie bro i don't have that much experience but i will try to do better and about the story i created it so i want to put alot changes different from cannon
@@Shadowsan396 Bro no offense, but the fact that you are a newbie doesn’t mean anything, when I created my first text story (Also Giyushino), I took into account every little detail and character of the characters in principle (I didn’t post this story on TH-cam, but I don’t deny that I have there were mistakes, but after a while I found them and corrected them until I got a very good story, and although I haven’t finished it yet (because I have no motivation), I can already say that it was better than yours, I’m just saying this because even if you are a beginner, you can still create good stories, for example: practice first, look at other text stories and comments under them, choose your favorite one for yourself and then create a good story from scratch, and even if you have no ideas, you can always take a little ideas from someone for each story, and this way you will definitely be able to create something good, but sometimes if you'll think about what you want to write it will be more helpful to you in the future.)
@@user-mz8hp3vm6s thanks I guess I could learn something from this
@@user-mz8hp3vm6s forget to tell you one thing
I don't know English
@@Shadowsan396 yeah i don't know English very well too, i was using translator lol💀, but i don't know what language do you know so I'm writing this to you in English (This time I don't used translator)