Yo guys I know I’m late to this but , I’m up at 5 am right now just finished listening to this story , and if somehow you guys see this reply , I just wanted to ask what other stories from creeps do you guys recommend , thanks bros
The video suddenly was unable to play once they decided to go on Mayhem Mountain and then eat, as if that were the exact point that TH-cam is warning me to get out while the story is still happy in some way.
Finally finished listening holy shit I am glad I didn’t take the warning. A bit confused by a few things that happened at the end but I loved it! Keep up the good work man!
So this is basically what you would get if someone had their Rollercoaster Tycoon kill-ride made in real life. If only the options in that game allowed for messing with the restraints and multiple tracks like this. Also noticed a LOT of lines getting repeated or stumbled over at roughly 50 minutes in, yet oddly enough there was almost none of that throughout the rest.
This is the saddest creepypasta I’ve ever seen. The author did such a good job of making lovable characters, and I had my fingers crossed for them to live the whole time, just to be let down at the very end. Not a lot of these stories are able to get me so attached to the characters, but this one succeeded. I’ll have to look at more of this author’s work because the level of dread this story filled me with was indescribable. I enjoyed the story still, despite being disappointed and terrified, and your narration helped with that. You can really set the mood of the story with the tone you use, and the slow, soothing way you talk just makes it even more chilling. This video was successful in giving me the creeps. Thank you.
The way the narrator described Brandon's death when Brandon had been the one who was the most eager to go with Mark on the ride... it really broke my heart
If it were me, i definitely would've run an empty car on each ride before i went on it. Including track B. The stupidity of these people, not testing before they ride it themselves, makes it no great loss. Great story!
Phil Zeo well I m sure thats what the contractors do when they test them. And they were told the ride was cleared. So i don't think they are acting stupid
Phil Zeo well what kind of developer clears a coaster that has a switch to a second track which is A) easy to find and B) obviously does something because it makes a loud noise through the entire park. Obviously this is a GIANT plot hole in the story because it makes no sense the company didn't find it. But from their perspective they would have no reason to believe the company would be that dumb
It could be they did find it, and were told by the same people at the end to never mention it. But it's still weird that they didn't test it themselves. Seriously, a track no one's been told about, in a park that's been abandoned for years, not going to say "You know, wouldn't hurt to test it really"?
@Robert Phillips Yeah i know how paranormal works. However the fuck you want it to since its all just fiction. Just saying "hurr durr mugic" is called lazy writing.
There is actually a band named "Mayhem". You totally should google it since, I assume, you like creepy stuff. Believe me, that band has fucked up and gruesome history.
this was amazing, and hearing it unedited almost made me smile- the basic mess ups someone does when reading aloud is so rare to hear in these readings, your voice is so calming, so being able to hear those little stutters was a bit of a welcome surprise? just to know, yea, you stutter and mess up, we all do,
“She wouldn’t say much abiut that day although- she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she dive-she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she finally did tell me something..”
It's not his fault - he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the f--after the trauma of the-- he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the fall. Of the fall.
Nah. It’s impossible to read perfectly for 50 minutes straight. Creeps probably repeats lines all the time because he messes up or used the wrong tone. But he usually edits the repeats out. In every video there’s at least one or two repeats that he forgets to edit out but this one definitely had a lot more.
As someone who narrates myself, we repeat the lines if we have made a mistake so we can edit the full section out more easily. He just missed it in editing.
He mention 1999 being the last year he went there as a kid and then he said that a bunch of kids went missing in the 1980’s and 1990’s and I got so exited that it was a reference to 1999 but it was much much worse...
God, your voice is the most amazing this I've ever heard, I think I may be addicted to listening to you. Thank you for the amazing content and posting so often!
C.K. Walker actually worked in the writing team of The Haunting of Hill House. She's extremely talented and NEEDS more recognition than she gets. I'd suggest the Deepwood trilogy to start. You're in for a treat. GREAT, absolutely amazing narration. Suscribing!
So basically a rich man built his kid an amusement park and his kid's reaction was: "Well sure, this is cool, but what if we added a track to one of the rides that kills people?"
@@Deathbatman the entire premise was stupid when you think about the logistics involved to create the underground portion of the ride. A billionaire built it. Yeah, sure. So many creepy pastas are just badly written.
@PungiFungi I hate it when horror stories aren't based in reality. I read one about an ice cream truck that kids die in (which is totally unbelievable, there's no profit to killing customers), or one about a skinwalker (also unreal since monsters don't exist). I mean, personally I expect all fictional horror stories and movies to be 100% real. I was shocked when I found out that all creepypasta stories are totally fake. It was almost too much to handle
@@MyXyle666 Eh, I don't necessarily think horror has to be based in reality - I mean, one of my favorite horror films involves people going into the Paris catacombs and winding up in hell - but the extent to which I'm willing to suspend my disbelief depends on what the story's about, you know? Monster stories or stories set in hell? Yeah, sure, whatever. An amusement park with a secret roller coaster track that kills people? Just doesn't make a lot of sense to me, no matter how far I suspend my disbelief.
i feel like they made a lot of unreasonable decisions, but i dont know exactly how im supposed to be picturing the room. why didnt they get up and walk along the tracks when it got slow and the shoulder bars released? there was nothing stopping them was there? it was perfectly reasonable for them to get up and climb back across the cars right?
53 minutes, hell yes. thank you for being extra amazing, Creeps ♥️ relieving to have a creepypasta account that has varied story times, and honestly your readings just help me when I’m on arist/writer’s block
i listen to creepypastas a lot and i can easily recognize the voices of all these youtubers and your voice by far is the best one to listen to and i always prefer to listen to the creepypastas you narrated.
i feel like i'll never finish listening to this story because i listen to creeps to fall asleep and i fall asleep so easily to this pasta everytime i try to finish it
Please don't take this as an insult but at around 49 minutes when you stalled that was actually very inspiration as a Creator myself I only have about 1,600 subscribers that I love dearly and a second Channel with about 50 but that made me realize that even the best of us, you!! Sometimes make mistakes this whole time I was asking myself he never makes a mistake he's perfect how does he do it so once again not an insult but I think you for showing me that mistakes happen and we can work through them while I'm creating our videos
Katastrophic Arts no it doesn't fit it it doesn't make any sense he clearly messed up there is no reason to make yourself look sad or upset during that part and then stall that long
Taps fan I was not at all saying that he sucks or that people don't make mistakes I just thought that it was uplifting for me as a new creator I have 1600 subscribers and growing that someone as well known in this genre still makes mistakes sometimes
Bro....this is actually extremely depressing. Finally going back to the place you loved as a child and riding your favorite ride with your best friends and your main friend. But you are tricked into a death trap and forced to watch helplessly as your main best friend slips from the ride with fear in his eyes,staring back into yours,as he slams against the rusted metal track. As he stares back at his you with his cold,lifeless eyes laying there dead,as you run his body over knowing you couldn’t have done anything. Then knowing that you friends fell through multi thousand foot hole to their dark,horrible,death. As you,and only you and your sister, walk away alive ,with the guilt of knowing there was nothing you could do after your friend lifelessly stares into your eyes.
I listened to this story when it first came out, years ago. I had never listened to it since then yet it has always stuck with me. It has given me a perpetual fear of roller coasters. I come back today to hear it one last time, before I make my way to Six Flags. The way you get so attached to the characters, just to have all but two of them ripped from you at the end of the story, is unlike any other creepypasta iv ever listened to or read. This is truly one of the greatest creepypastas ever written, and I will most likely remember it, time and time again, until the day I have to take my journey down the dreaded, track B.
There should be a steel roller coaster called "Life". Not only would it be named after the familiar simile, but it would be designed to look like a strand of DNA spiraling and then separating. You know?
That was the idea. The park was built by a billionaire for his son, who was a sick psychopath. It wasn't the rides that were meant to amuse the kid, it was Track B, so he could watch people die in a long, convoluted way every day, from the viewing room described at the end. What's so disturbing is how that could, in theory, happen, with enough money and enough lack of caring.
@@Wandergirl108 wandergirl, Hello. Thanks for explaining it to people who are a little slow in getting this story. I loved it. One of the best creepypastas in my opinion.
Creeps is definitely my favorite narrator on any of these spooky story sites- he gets so animated and into the stories, I love it- he also sounds EXACTLY like the narrator of Winnie the Pooh... which makes it a tad creepier still. Other than some weird audio fumbling at the very end, this story was by far the most suspenseful I’ve heard in a really long time. The moral of the story- Charlotte knew not to ride some untested, unknown ride in an old abandoned amusement park. Charlotte is smart. Be like Charlotte.
…I have questions, but I feel like they have answers. I just feel…confused. Stunned, even, I guess. This was a good and very effective pasta, that's about all I can say for sure.
SUPER ! One of the best written, imaginative and ambitious Creepypastas I have ever heard. Could make a great movie with the right stars and Director. Well Narrated too ! 4 Stars all around ! A CreepyPasta classic !
Makes me miss Astroworld. It always felt like a death trap, but that was part of the fun. The Cyclone, a wooden coaster that you could feel the lean in the timber’s. Barnstormer, picture a giant swing set and you get strapped into a sling as you get pulled back. The pucker moment was always that first free fall from release. What a rush!
Thank you for this story again since Chilling tales from the Darkside locked it story up some time ago. I hope you and anothers manage to get some of the other stories that they locked up.
Christopher82689 creeps is making content without permission from the author. Chilling Tales actually works with the author and gets permission before using someone’s creative content. So there’s a reason they SHOULD be the only ones with those stories, because that’s what the author has approved.
Fantastic video! Only one complaint, and it's about the author -- "empathetically" vs. "emphatically," 27:07. Don't know why that's getting under my skin so much -- your voice is so soothing it took me a second to realize anything was the matter
Andrew bunny I agree wholeheartedly. His voice is awesome. He really lets the emotions come through. I listen to these kinds of things to help me fall asleep and his voice is perfect.
I agree he has a great voice but I think hes got his own thing going on hes making enough money and so forth but keep doing u and maybe you will have 1mil subs too
Whats with all the "paranormal" talk and the engineer was dumb talk. Okay. Obviously the owner was a sadistic rich man that built the "Death Track" and liked hearing the screams of the victims (ride and room was specifically built for acoustics). The man also made a special room with a panoramic view and a single chair for him to sit in and watch as he watched the final survivors get to pick their own death (SAVAGE!!) The massive amount of money that the bank couldnt figure out being transfered to other parties was "Hush Money" for the engineers and inspectors.
Oh, that's right, I forgot about the money that kept going somewhere weird! That fills in the last plot hole, frankly. Now the only valid point is that the friends didn't bother sending an empty car through…and also that opening Track B caused such a loud noise that no one ever noticed…but those are pretty tiny plot holes, with the rest filled in. And yeah anyone who thinks there's any paranormal element to this pasta is incredibly dumb or has heard too many paranormal pastas to think otherwise.
@@Wandergirl108 It's also possible that when track B was run, a new car would be run in from a separate line onto the main track to make it appear as if it had run properly. That would easily trick anyone who tested the track, since you can't see the entire track run. It WAS built to put on a show, after all
@@katlahay6285 like you'd own a whole ass amusement park and could grab a go pro to figure it out or call you're engineer guy on you're payroll up or just shrug and say it's prolly not safe
@@impyrobot Still possible the engineers didn't ride in the cars when they ran it through. And the engineers did clear the ride. They likely would have said something if the one track hadn't been tested. I'm still with my theory that there were backup cars run into the main track to stop suspicion. They absolutely SHOULD have used some kind of camera to see the whole track run, but you have to have suspension of belief for some of these stories, just a little bit
honestly ruined theme parks for me... best creepy pasta I’ve ever heard. was on splash mountain today and noticed it had changed somewhat from when i went awhile ago. it seemed darker. instead of thinking like a normal person I just assumed Walt Disney had built a track b and these were my final moments lol.
I really enjoy this story, mostly because of how the characters and events seem so realistic They act like real people and have real motivations and also react to situations like real people Its really refreshing to hear compared to some other horror writing It also reminds me of a story my dad told me about his own accident on a roller coaster and the shock it caused
This is 1 of those stories that you can hear 100Xs & it never gets old.
Angel Mist
👍👌
I personally would recommend the harbinger experiment if you haven't already
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Creeps narration
Another one would probably be Normal Pr*n For Normal People lol
Yo guys I know I’m late to this but , I’m up at 5 am right now just finished listening to this story , and if somehow you guys see this reply , I just wanted to ask what other stories from creeps do you guys recommend , thanks bros
Your Mom Probably “I taught creative writing and two stories stood out” and “the Ronald McDonald house” are pretty good ;D
The video suddenly was unable to play once they decided to go on Mayhem Mountain and then eat, as if that were the exact point that TH-cam is warning me to get out while the story is still happy in some way.
Finally finished listening holy shit I am glad I didn’t take the warning. A bit confused by a few things that happened at the end but I loved it! Keep up the good work man!
Drablord that literaly jus happend to me😂
*do do do do, do do do do*
Andy Rodriguez this is my eleventh time listening! It's so worth it! Best out there!
Brandon: "pull it" Internet lag "GET OUT WE'LL YOU STILL CAN"
So this is basically what you would get if someone had their Rollercoaster Tycoon kill-ride made in real life. If only the options in that game allowed for messing with the restraints and multiple tracks like this.
Also noticed a LOT of lines getting repeated or stumbled over at roughly 50 minutes in, yet oddly enough there was almost none of that throughout the rest.
Pretty sure that's how it was written originally.
@@RighteousJ nah, just parts he forgot to cut out
These narrations have to be repeated per line so when editing the narrator can pick the best sound.
@@RighteousJ lol
Common last words: “What could go wrong?”
what about " Fuck it, let's do it"
That's how you jinx yourself.
they should get a T-shirt that says "I Survived Mayhem Mountain"
Seriously I would so rock it
"and all I got was a lousy t-shirt"
I'm on it, to CustomInk I go
@Blunt Boy you good chief
@Blunt Boy same
This is the saddest creepypasta I’ve ever seen. The author did such a good job of making lovable characters, and I had my fingers crossed for them to live the whole time, just to be let down at the very end. Not a lot of these stories are able to get me so attached to the characters, but this one succeeded. I’ll have to look at more of this author’s work because the level of dread this story filled me with was indescribable. I enjoyed the story still, despite being disappointed and terrified, and your narration helped with that. You can really set the mood of the story with the tone you use, and the slow, soothing way you talk just makes it even more chilling. This video was successful in giving me the creeps. Thank you.
Well said! I would say the same myself but I don't need to, I feel the same way you do about this. The author and Creeps are so talented.
@@lilfruitbat Yep! Thank you!
The way the narrator described Brandon's death when Brandon had been the one who was the most eager to go with Mark on the ride... it really broke my heart
Have you read or listened to Penpal by Dathan Auerbach? That's the saddest creepypasta, and it was turned into a novel and sold in stores and Amazon.
See, they teased her! Charlotte listened to her instincts; she was right! Mayhem mountain was just code name for torture trail!
yesss stan charlotte
If it were me, i definitely would've run an empty car on each ride before i went on it. Including track B. The stupidity of these people, not testing before they ride it themselves, makes it no great loss. Great story!
Phil Zeo well I m sure thats what the contractors do when they test them. And they were told the ride was cleared. So i don't think they are acting stupid
Newbie at Newhouse
Well who cleared track B then?
Phil Zeo well what kind of developer clears a coaster that has a switch to a second track which is A) easy to find and B) obviously does something because it makes a loud noise through the entire park.
Obviously this is a GIANT plot hole in the story because it makes no sense the company didn't find it. But from their perspective they would have no reason to believe the company would be that dumb
It could be they did find it, and were told by the same people at the end to never mention it. But it's still weird that they didn't test it themselves. Seriously, a track no one's been told about, in a park that's been abandoned for years, not going to say "You know, wouldn't hurt to test it really"?
@Robert Phillips Yeah i know how paranormal works.
However the fuck you want it to since its all just fiction.
Just saying "hurr durr mugic" is called lazy writing.
Pardon the pun but i guess you can say they had the ride of their lives.
P.S. im a father now so i have to pratice these bad jokes.
You are well on your way, Grasshopper...
does it just happen right away or is it a gradual increase
Congrats man
What do you call a bear in the woods with no teeth???
A gummy bear. 😁you're welcome.
The ride was to die for.
Mayhem Mountain could be a great band name
Nathan Never I agree, a speed metal band kind of like Ministry
Mayhem mountain is the name of my dick
There is actually a band named "Mayhem". You totally should google it since, I assume, you like creepy stuff. Believe me, that band has fucked up and gruesome history.
Ellie Saint :(
Ellie Saint :( still not good enough
I think a better title would be "track B"
Cees Mol no that spoils it
@@cloedavenport agreed. It gives too much info.
i literally just thought of that when it ended lol
Awee well at least I know now what to expect lol
Cees Mol ye
this was amazing, and hearing it unedited almost made me smile- the basic mess ups someone does when reading aloud is so rare to hear in these readings, your voice is so calming, so being able to hear those little stutters was a bit of a welcome surprise? just to know, yea, you stutter and mess up, we all do,
“She wouldn’t say much abiut that day although- she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she dive-she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she finally did tell me something..”
It's not his fault - he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the f--after the trauma of the-- he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the fall. Of the fall.
It sounded like he took sleeping pills before starting this recording, and they kicked in right at the end. Ha! XD
Nah. It’s impossible to read perfectly for 50 minutes straight. Creeps probably repeats lines all the time because he messes up or used the wrong tone. But he usually edits the repeats out. In every video there’s at least one or two repeats that he forgets to edit out but this one definitely had a lot more.
Yep. That's what happened... thanks captain dumbass
As someone who narrates myself, we repeat the lines if we have made a mistake so we can edit the full section out more easily. He just missed it in editing.
He mention 1999 being the last year he went there as a kid and then he said that a bunch of kids went missing in the 1980’s and 1990’s and I got so exited that it was a reference to 1999 but it was much much worse...
God, your voice is the most amazing this I've ever heard, I think I may be addicted to listening to you. Thank you for the amazing content and posting so often!
Swallow a barrel
Iyla Rutherford I’ve been listening to him eve since middle school . I love his soothing voice I’m freaking old now and I’m still stuck on here
I could literally picture this whole story in my head so creepy!
"Who wants to go to a Theme park?"
Me: see's creepy clown image, you thats no theme park!, thats a scream park!!!
@@KitDarlene LoL
This reminds me of a more messed up version of Final Destination 3 where all the people die on the roller coaster.
Tina yeah. It's awful
Tina I liked final destination
This is a combination of the subway scene and the rollercoaster scene
"Besides, half of them are married."
"Really? Which half?"
Oh my God I fucking love Charlotte.
C.K. Walker actually worked in the writing team of The Haunting of Hill House. She's extremely talented and NEEDS more recognition than she gets. I'd suggest the Deepwood trilogy to start. You're in for a treat.
GREAT, absolutely amazing narration. Suscribing!
*father has uploaded*
So basically a rich man built his kid an amusement park and his kid's reaction was: "Well sure, this is cool, but what if we added a track to one of the rides that kills people?"
Pretty much, seems weird he would make that happen
@@Deathbatman the entire premise was stupid when you think about the logistics involved to create the underground portion of the ride. A billionaire built it. Yeah, sure. So many creepy pastas are just badly written.
@PungiFungi I hate it when horror stories aren't based in reality. I read one about an ice cream truck that kids die in (which is totally unbelievable, there's no profit to killing customers), or one about a skinwalker (also unreal since monsters don't exist). I mean, personally I expect all fictional horror stories and movies to be 100% real. I was shocked when I found out that all creepypasta stories are totally fake. It was almost too much to handle
@@MyXyle666 Eh, I don't necessarily think horror has to be based in reality - I mean, one of my favorite horror films involves people going into the Paris catacombs and winding up in hell - but the extent to which I'm willing to suspend my disbelief depends on what the story's about, you know? Monster stories or stories set in hell? Yeah, sure, whatever. An amusement park with a secret roller coaster track that kills people? Just doesn't make a lot of sense to me, no matter how far I suspend my disbelief.
@PungiFungi I try to leave the "Logistics" to the writer. Can't wait for your story to read by Creeps
AWESOME story man! WOW I had my hands clenched and my teeth grinding through the whole thing!
Sheesh now that all of his friends are dead. He has to pay off that multi million dollar loan to the bank all by himself 🤣🤣🤣
Maybe they have life insurance lmao
The horror
Thats the scariest part!
Thts a fate worse than death
If student loans were made into a rollercoaster
This is my favorite creepypasta! Yes!
I have a Clever Name I Swear mine too 💖💖
Love slow burn horror stories
Also, pretty sure Charlotte is glad she didn't go on the ride that day.
If the loan for the park gives you nightmares you don't know true terror...
*STUDENT LOANS*
@Blind Eye - I been there......
*ASDF'S VERSION OF DUN DUN DUN PLAYS*
AAAAAHHHH!!! NOOOO!!!
Blind Eye the horror!!!!! 😭
I'm sorry, but student loans in the 100's of millions of dollars range is several powers less intense than a business loan for several million.
*I hate this for physically making me sick and feel like I’m on a roller coast, but god damn it do I love this*
All my friends are dead
CARDB0ARD push me to the edge
CARDB0ARD
😏
Turbonegro
i feel like they made a lot of unreasonable decisions, but i dont know exactly how im supposed to be picturing the room. why didnt they get up and walk along the tracks when it got slow and the shoulder bars released? there was nothing stopping them was there? it was perfectly reasonable for them to get up and climb back across the cars right?
The shoulder bars were only unlocked during the most dangerous parts. Other than that, they were always locked.
When it was slowed and unlocked they were high up and upside down
53 minutes, hell yes. thank you for being extra amazing, Creeps ♥️ relieving to have a creepypasta account that has varied story times, and honestly your readings just help me when I’m on arist/writer’s block
Also thank god that he doesn’t have a bunch of adds
hyperspace are you a furry to I am
macaria the husky eh I just like drawing them, so I mean sure
This story makes great use of adjectives, especially during the "track B" experience. It's almost like I'm actually there. Pretty gripping stuff.
i listen to creepypastas a lot and i can easily recognize the voices of all these youtubers and your voice by far is the best one to listen to and i always prefer to listen to the creepypastas you narrated.
This is my ASMR or whatever its called. Cant sleep without your stories
I listen to EVERY video when I sleep and this is BY FAR the best one so far. I want a video made for mayhem mountain I can’t imagine that cavern.
i feel like i'll never finish listening to this story because i listen to creeps to fall asleep and i fall asleep so easily to this pasta everytime i try to finish it
Well Charlotte, your an adult now, I think you can take on the viper. I’m dead
Pliff j
well I now hate theme parks
Just don’t go on a ride with track b 😂
I already dont like them lol
Wild Harpy I bet they found Horrorland.
Not me, I still love them, especially Walt Disney World.
You have the best Mayhem Mountain story out of everyone! Your voice is just that much superior 💜 Also, this ride needs to exist!
Why does this ride need to exist? It needs to NOT exist… >.>
"What's the worst that could happen?"
Please don't take this as an insult but at around 49 minutes when you stalled that was actually very inspiration as a Creator myself I only have about 1,600 subscribers that I love dearly and a second Channel with about 50 but that made me realize that even the best of us, you!! Sometimes make mistakes this whole time I was asking myself he never makes a mistake he's perfect how does he do it so once again not an insult but I think you for showing me that mistakes happen and we can work through them while I'm creating our videos
Jeffrey Nadolny I think some of those stalls were on purpose to make the narrator seem afraid
He messes up on multiple occasions, just not as much as he did on this one so it’s less noticeable
Katastrophic Arts no it doesn't fit it it doesn't make any sense he clearly messed up there is no reason to make yourself look sad or upset during that part and then stall that long
Taps fan I was not at all saying that he sucks or that people don't make mistakes I just thought that it was uplifting for me as a new creator I have 1600 subscribers and growing that someone as well known in this genre still makes mistakes sometimes
Katastrophic Arts probably an editing error
ARE YOU SURE ABOUT THAT
This one literally had me shaking. This one was really well written and well read. I have never reacted this way towards a Creepypasta.
Bro....this is actually extremely depressing. Finally going back to the place you loved as a child and riding your favorite ride with your best friends and your main friend. But you are tricked into a death trap and forced to watch helplessly as your main best friend slips from the ride with fear in his eyes,staring back into yours,as he slams against the rusted metal track. As he stares back at his you with his cold,lifeless eyes laying there dead,as you run his body over knowing you couldn’t have done anything. Then knowing that you friends fell through multi thousand foot hole to their dark,horrible,death. As you,and only you and your sister, walk away alive ,with the guilt of knowing there was nothing you could do after your friend lifelessly stares into your eyes.
I listened to this story when it first came out, years ago. I had never listened to it since then yet it has always stuck with me. It has given me a perpetual fear of roller coasters. I come back today to hear it one last time, before I make my way to Six Flags. The way you get so attached to the characters, just to have all but two of them ripped from you at the end of the story, is unlike any other creepypasta iv ever listened to or read. This is truly one of the greatest creepypastas ever written, and I will most likely remember it, time and time again, until the day I have to take my journey down the dreaded, track B.
The creepypastas like this and 1999 are the best when they have long times
The day this video came out, it became my favorite creepy pasta and it still remains so to this day!
This was a pretty good one. I often end up disappointed and skip to tje next one. This was worth my time. Now Im going to watch another one.
I actually searched this one to listen to again. I don't uaually repeat stories, but this one stuck with me and inspired a number of nightmares.
*spoiler*
What was up with the chair? Would the rich guy's son sit there and watch the kids dying?
JustAnime ForMe Yes.
That's exactly it. He was a man of simple pleasures, one of them being the impending death and terror of children
The second they said track b I was literally whispering shouting MURDER DEN MURDER DEN
There should be a steel roller coaster called "Life". Not only would it be named after the familiar simile, but it would be designed to look like a strand of DNA spiraling and then separating. You know?
One of my favorite stories ever from TH-cam. I’m an Action park veteran. I felt how they felt going back to that place.
Oh great now I'm upset. Why didn't they just send an empty car into the track B?
Whoever built that damn ride was a sick psychopath.
That was the idea. The park was built by a billionaire for his son, who was a sick psychopath. It wasn't the rides that were meant to amuse the kid, it was Track B, so he could watch people die in a long, convoluted way every day, from the viewing room described at the end. What's so disturbing is how that could, in theory, happen, with enough money and enough lack of caring.
@@Wandergirl108 wandergirl, Hello. Thanks for explaining it to people who are a little slow in getting this story. I loved it. One of the best creepypastas in my opinion.
Creeps is definitely my favorite narrator on any of these spooky story sites- he gets so animated and into the stories, I love it- he also sounds EXACTLY like the narrator of Winnie the Pooh... which makes it a tad creepier still. Other than some weird audio fumbling at the very end, this story was by far the most suspenseful I’ve heard in a really long time. The moral of the story- Charlotte knew not to ride some untested, unknown ride in an old abandoned amusement park. Charlotte is smart. Be like Charlotte.
This is probably my new favorite creepy pasta.
Along side the harbinger experiment
I really love creepypastas like this. Idk what it is but it brings true goosebumps and chills and makes you feel anxiety.
CK Walker dude you need to either write a prologue to this or a sequel. About what happened to those other kids and the evil owner!
Jaden Dobbs oh believe me pal...Ive listened to it like 5 times or more
You're good at this, I listen to these creepypastas whilst playing games.
…I have questions, but I feel like they have answers. I just feel…confused. Stunned, even, I guess. This was a good and very effective pasta, that's about all I can say for sure.
This is one of the scariest stories I've listened to in a LONG time.
How you read it made it even better, keep up the nice work man!
I was so happy listening to this when this started. Then I remembered this was a creepypasta.
GURLLLLL!!!! WE LOVE A GOOD ADVENTUREPASTA!!!! I’m actually living for this story. I really enjoyed it.
DUDE. This was SO good and SO awful!!
This is the first creepypasta that’s scared me... for over a year. Beautiful execution, creeps!
dear god its so *long*
Skeleton _w that's what she said
*l o n g*
Long as long long man?
l o n g
Abby Johnson Good One
Yay!!!! Love new uploads! Have a good day everyone!!
Also super stoked it’s a long one! Hell yessssss
Always gonna look at the control panel when I ride roller coasters. Anything with a track b losses my business.
SUPER ! One of the best written, imaginative and ambitious Creepypastas I have ever heard. Could make a great movie with the right stars and Director. Well Narrated too ! 4 Stars all around ! A CreepyPasta classic !
Yo so for the longer ones could you do an upload that's an all black video with just audio? It makes it better to listen at night. Thanks fam
not here to cater to you :D
Makes me miss Astroworld. It always felt like a death trap, but that was part of the fun. The Cyclone, a wooden coaster that you could feel the lean in the timber’s. Barnstormer, picture a giant swing set and you get strapped into a sling as you get pulled back. The pucker moment was always that first free fall from release. What a rush!
Thank you for this wonderful gift dad
Great job! Awesome story and awesome narrative! This has made it to my favorite CP list. Stay spooky.
The Rides And Names Of the Rides Seem Very Similar To Minnesota's Valley Fair
Señior Rubio I WAS LOOKING FOR THIS COMMENT
It Also Helps That The Road that Valley Fair Is Named "Valley Park Drive"
This is such a good story, one of my favourites, it's just so creepy, great narration too 💫
This is one of my favourite CreepyPastas out there, and one of my first ones that I ever listened to, thanks for narrating this one!!!
Thank you for this story again since Chilling tales from the Darkside locked it story up some time ago. I hope you and anothers manage to get some of the other stories that they locked up.
Christopher82689 creeps is making content without permission from the author. Chilling Tales actually works with the author and gets permission before using someone’s creative content. So there’s a reason they SHOULD be the only ones with those stories, because that’s what the author has approved.
Wow my guy
It's been a minute since I heard a spook noodle tale. You have one of the best voices for this. I love it
Hahaha....you said "spooky noodle"!! Lmao!
"Spooky noodle"!! HAHAHAHA!! I dont know why that is so damn funny to me! But it is! Lmao!
Love the videos. Been watching for a couple years now, its my daily sleep stories, keep it up brother
Shoulda called Allstate, you could have avoided Mayhem Mountain like me
Fantastic video! Only one complaint, and it's about the author -- "empathetically" vs. "emphatically," 27:07. Don't know why that's getting under my skin so much -- your voice is so soothing it took me a second to realize anything was the matter
Awesome video man your cool and your voice sound spooky you should work for reading scary books who agree with me
Andrew bunny I agree wholeheartedly. His voice is awesome. He really lets the emotions come through. I listen to these kinds of things to help me fall asleep and his voice is perfect.
Creeps also tries to avoid heavy curse words, which Mr. Creepypasta is known better for in contrast.
I agree he has a great voice but I think hes got his own thing going on hes making enough money and so forth but keep doing u and maybe you will have 1mil subs too
Ur channel is y i started jogging so i can enjoy exercising by listening to ur channel when exercising
Did kingspook do this? No hate i listed again but i think he did. Each of their styles brings a different vibe. Love it.
Markus Barrett Love your channel ❤
Sheed S. Thanks!!!! you like the comedy or the music? Lol
By far one of my favorite creepypastas
Wanna here a story full of mistakes ready......
My life
Dont worry I have a plan Morgan!
**hear
hands down one of the best stories I have heard so far. great job!
Whats with all the "paranormal" talk and the engineer was dumb talk. Okay. Obviously the owner was a sadistic rich man that built the "Death Track" and liked hearing the screams of the victims (ride and room was specifically built for acoustics). The man also made a special room with a panoramic view and a single chair for him to sit in and watch as he watched the final survivors get to pick their own death (SAVAGE!!) The massive amount of money that the bank couldnt figure out being transfered to other parties was "Hush Money" for the engineers and inspectors.
Oh, that's right, I forgot about the money that kept going somewhere weird! That fills in the last plot hole, frankly. Now the only valid point is that the friends didn't bother sending an empty car through…and also that opening Track B caused such a loud noise that no one ever noticed…but those are pretty tiny plot holes, with the rest filled in.
And yeah anyone who thinks there's any paranormal element to this pasta is incredibly dumb or has heard too many paranormal pastas to think otherwise.
@@Wandergirl108 It's also possible that when track B was run, a new car would be run in from a separate line onto the main track to make it appear as if it had run properly. That would easily trick anyone who tested the track, since you can't see the entire track run. It WAS built to put on a show, after all
@@katlahay6285 like you'd own a whole ass amusement park and could grab a go pro to figure it out or call you're engineer guy on you're payroll up or just shrug and say it's prolly not safe
@@impyrobot Still possible the engineers didn't ride in the cars when they ran it through. And the engineers did clear the ride. They likely would have said something if the one track hadn't been tested. I'm still with my theory that there were backup cars run into the main track to stop suspicion. They absolutely SHOULD have used some kind of camera to see the whole track run, but you have to have suspension of belief for some of these stories, just a little bit
@@katlahay6285 running a camera for the whole thing seems so niche to me that most people wouldn't bother
I remember listening to this on a podcast a while ago, still one of my favorite creepypastas of all time
I fell asleep when this started and I dreamed 75 percent of this story... Terrifying...
Poor you😳
Nice
Joe hawley enjoyer?
This deserves a movie.
i heard that piano sweet dreams are made of this in the background
Still one of my favourite pastas to date, nice work!
This is gonna be a good one
Man when did this channel hit 1.4mil? I remember when there was only like 300k subs
honestly ruined theme parks for me... best creepy pasta I’ve ever heard. was on splash mountain today and noticed it had changed somewhat from when i went awhile ago. it seemed darker. instead of thinking like a normal person I just assumed Walt Disney had built a track b and these were my final moments lol.
I really enjoy this story, mostly because of how the characters and events seem so realistic
They act like real people and have real motivations and also react to situations like real people
Its really refreshing to hear compared to some other horror writing
It also reminds me of a story my dad told me about his own accident on a roller coaster and the shock it caused
There's also nothing supernatural...just some sicko. This is one of my favourite creepypastas.
He had his phone the entire time 😑
This story sounds like a lifetime dream. Besides all my friends dying, but y’know