These TH-cam short stories very rarely stand up to the even slightest bit of scrutiny I'm afraid. A welcome surprise is the rare one, now and again, that does. 😊
You need to lay off the sarcasm in these stories a bit. The stories and the storylines are great but you're really dragging it down by overdoing the sarcasm and the jokey jokey earthling thing...
The sarcasm is over done and the story gets a grade of incomplete as my only reaction is a raised eyebrow and a sharp pain in my right side temple...Just sayin'
Good story, but I am getting really tired of the over worked sarcasm in a lot of these stories. It is way over done. The occasional comment OK, it adds humour, but this guy wants answers and he can open his sarcastic mouth without a snide remark to the answers for EVERY question he wants answers to. I feel like saying STFU and listen!
The descriptions in this story are wonderful. Best I have heard. They keep coming, too! You should keep this up, seriously. Thank you so much!
This definitely needs a continuation. Part two please...
Why is Cathlet being tested? I have been reading SF for 65 (I am 75) years. I have fine tuned my seeing flaws. I see many flaws here.
These TH-cam short stories very rarely stand up to the even slightest bit of scrutiny I'm afraid. A welcome surprise is the rare one, now and again, that does. 😊
Sad you think it needs so many quibs
The sarcasm gets boring, in the way of the story.
Yes it does, another boss babe and sarcastic simp story
You need to lay off the sarcasm in these stories a bit. The stories and the storylines are great but you're really dragging it down by overdoing the sarcasm and the jokey jokey earthling thing...
The sarcasm is over done and the story gets a grade of incomplete as my only reaction is a raised eyebrow and a sharp pain in my right side temple...Just sayin'
What no kiss
martin is annoying...his sarcasm is over used....he comes off as a jerk.
Was Martin human or alien? Does not make sense.👎
Well, keep trying. Eventually, you might have a decent story.
This wasn't it. 😢
Good story, but I am getting really tired of the over worked sarcasm in a lot of these stories. It is way over done. The occasional comment OK, it adds humour, but this guy wants answers and he can open his sarcastic mouth without a snide remark to the answers for EVERY question he wants answers to. I feel like saying STFU and listen!