Love "peek & Critique" It is a hands-on approach to metre analysis and the understanding of different metres in use. If had to rate it, I'd have given ten out of ten. Please make more videos on "peek & Critique". P.S.: I'd really appreciate it if you could make a video on contemporary poems and explain how inconsistent meter scheme is justified therein. Thank you.
I always learn so much from your critiques! I had fun with this assignment. Thanks, Renee, for doing these. It's so generous of you. Very clever ant poem you shared as the sample!
So glad you enjoyed the assignment, Marty! If you like that one, check out the latest video for the mask poem writing prompt -- those are my favorite kinds of poems to write!
I enjoyed this so much! I'm not a children's book writer but I adore a book with a solid rhyme scheme. It drives me insane that there are so many books out there with such a weak sense of meter. My five year old has been gifted some stinkers and I just want to hurl them against the wall! But, of course, I am a meter snob. I was just going down a meter-related wormhole when I found your video. Thanks for this! Subscribed. :)
Oof, don't get me started on published books with weak rhyme and meter! It's mind-boggling. Luckily, they are the exception rather than the norm because there are hundreds of expert rhymers with published books out there -- so don't give up! Have you read my new picture book THE CRAB BALLET? Perhaps your 5yo will enjoy it. (And I'm pretty sure the meter is spot on, hahaha.) Also: I LOVE your channel and just subscribed! I'm an actress/director and theater teacher, so obviously it's up my alley. I randomly clicked on the Helena speech and immediately loved that you mentioned "clear lines of sight" and "plosive words." And also the "what do I do with my hands" video -- hahaha! Classic problems. I have an old video on another channel for tips on how to recite poems and it has some similar content: th-cam.com/video/Cca7SRzsbBw/w-d-xo.html&ab_channel=NoWaterRiver Great to "meet" you!
I''m so grateful for these videos! Thank you thank you thank you! I'm trying to wrap my head around how to spot the difference between a dactylic line with an added unstressed syllable at the beginning (as described at 3:52 in the video), and an anapestic line with a truncated first unstressed syllable - wouldn't both be u/uu/uu/uu/? And if is okay to have totally headless lines in anapestic (not sure if it is?) where I'm truncating both first unstressed syllables (/uu/uu/uu/), how do I tell that apart from a standard dactylic line (/uu/uu/uu/)?
I'm sorry I didn't see your comment, Daniel! We're talking about metrical variation here, which can be tricky. The important thing is to find and/or establish the DOMINANT METER of the whole piece. Once you have that, you can mark the variations as just that -- variations. The difference between the dactylic and anapestic lines you describe is six of one, half dozen of the other. The bottom line is whether the variation works in the whole. Likewise for a completely headless anapestic foot -- does it work in context of the whole? (In truth, it would probably work better if the previous line has a feminine ending.)
Thank you! My first poem picture book THE CRAB BALLET is coming out in March 2022, and my collection of poetry is coming Summer 2023. :) I have poems in many anthologies, which you can see on my website: www.reneelatulippe.com. Thanks for asking!
@LyricalLanguageLab now it works!?!?! Yeah, weird glitch I guess. I'm enjoying your content. I have written a rhyming children's story and now I need to see learn if it is actually written properly.
Love your channel! Thank you for your clear explanations and including lots of examples!
You're most welcome! I'm so glad you are finding the videos helpful! :)
fantastic, thank you for this breakdown- subscribed!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you found it helpful. :)
Gah! I just submitted something. Eek! Seriously though, thank you so much for sharing your talents - we learn so much from you!
Thanks for submitting, Susie! I'm so glad you find the videos helpful. :)
Love "peek & Critique" It is a hands-on approach to metre analysis and the understanding of different metres in use.
If had to rate it, I'd have given ten out of ten. Please make more videos on "peek & Critique".
P.S.: I'd really appreciate it if you could make a video on contemporary poems and explain how inconsistent meter scheme is justified therein.
Thank you.
I'm working on a picture book which is also in dactylic tetrameter. Your video was so helpful! Thank you!
I'm so glad! Best of luck with your manuscript!
Thank you so much for your critique, now I know how to move forward.
I do hope you found it helpful, Madeleine! Thanks again for sending in your work. :)
I always learn so much from your critiques! I had fun with this assignment. Thanks, Renee, for doing these. It's so generous of you. Very clever ant poem you shared as the sample!
So glad you enjoyed the assignment, Marty! If you like that one, check out the latest video for the mask poem writing prompt -- those are my favorite kinds of poems to write!
I enjoyed this so much! I'm not a children's book writer but I adore a book with a solid rhyme scheme. It drives me insane that there are so many books out there with such a weak sense of meter. My five year old has been gifted some stinkers and I just want to hurl them against the wall! But, of course, I am a meter snob. I was just going down a meter-related wormhole when I found your video. Thanks for this! Subscribed. :)
Oof, don't get me started on published books with weak rhyme and meter! It's mind-boggling. Luckily, they are the exception rather than the norm because there are hundreds of expert rhymers with published books out there -- so don't give up! Have you read my new picture book THE CRAB BALLET? Perhaps your 5yo will enjoy it. (And I'm pretty sure the meter is spot on, hahaha.)
Also: I LOVE your channel and just subscribed! I'm an actress/director and theater teacher, so obviously it's up my alley. I randomly clicked on the Helena speech and immediately loved that you mentioned "clear lines of sight" and "plosive words." And also the "what do I do with my hands" video -- hahaha! Classic problems. I have an old video on another channel for tips on how to recite poems and it has some similar content: th-cam.com/video/Cca7SRzsbBw/w-d-xo.html&ab_channel=NoWaterRiver Great to "meet" you!
I''m so grateful for these videos! Thank you thank you thank you! I'm trying to wrap my head around how to spot the difference between a dactylic line with an added unstressed syllable at the beginning (as described at 3:52 in the video), and an anapestic line with a truncated first unstressed syllable - wouldn't both be u/uu/uu/uu/? And if is okay to have totally headless lines in anapestic (not sure if it is?) where I'm truncating both first unstressed syllables (/uu/uu/uu/), how do I tell that apart from a standard dactylic line (/uu/uu/uu/)?
I'm sorry I didn't see your comment, Daniel! We're talking about metrical variation here, which can be tricky. The important thing is to find and/or establish the DOMINANT METER of the whole piece. Once you have that, you can mark the variations as just that -- variations. The difference between the dactylic and anapestic lines you describe is six of one, half dozen of the other. The bottom line is whether the variation works in the whole. Likewise for a completely headless anapestic foot -- does it work in context of the whole? (In truth, it would probably work better if the previous line has a feminine ending.)
Excellent video! Man....I have some work to do lol
Ha! Get to work!
Wow! This is great. Do you teach an online class for this?
Hi, Nancy! Yes I do, with self-study versions. 🤗 You can find out about my Lyrical Language Lab here: www.reneelatulippe.com/writing-courses/
Thank you! Loved your poem! Sorry, an ignorant question: Did you publish any books? Thank you, Eva
Thank you! My first poem picture book THE CRAB BALLET is coming out in March 2022, and my collection of poetry is coming Summer 2023. :) I have poems in many anthologies, which you can see on my website: www.reneelatulippe.com. Thanks for asking!
@@LyricalLanguageLab thank you very much! We’ll check them out!
Did you recently edit this video? I can't hear any speech. The sound effects are still there, however. Judging by the comments, this is a new issue.
Hello! The video is playing fine for me. I'm sorry you can't hear it! Maybe just a weird glitch??
@LyricalLanguageLab now it works!?!?! Yeah, weird glitch I guess. I'm enjoying your content. I have written a rhyming children's story and now I need to see learn if it is actually written properly.
@@michaelott55 Oh good, so glad it's working for you. I hope you find it useful in your rhyming journey! :)
Donny Dingle went to town
Donny stumbled--then he frowned.