I love this! The intro looks awesome! The animation is amazing! You also did great voice acting Spottedleaf! I’m happy to voice act as Smudge and Mousefur in this!
Here are your lines for Ravenpaw since he appears first in the episode (Panting/Scared/Stuttering) We m-met some R-RiverClan warriors beside the stream, not far from the Sunnijgrocks, Oakheart w-was among them. (Scared/Panting) R-Redtail told Oakheart to keep h-his hunting p-parties out of ThunderClan territory, h-he said t-the next RiverClan warrior to be caught in Th-ThunderClan territory wound b-be killed. B-but Oakheart wound not b-back down, h-he said his clan had to be fed, whatever we threaten. (Tired/Panting/Exhausted) That’s when the warriors st-started to attack u-us. I-it was hard to see what a-was happening, th-the fighting w-was viscious. I saw Oakheart had Redtail on the ground and then… (Passing out) Redtail…Redtail… (Tired) I-is he gone? (Shy) B-bye.
All times when proportions are incorrect: 0:40 2:17 3:01 3:05 3:21 3:47 4:04 (the gray cats tongue 4:10 4:19 5:25 6:34 6:49 7:04 7:21 7:39 7:48 7:51 8:02 blue stars head looks like it got ripped up by dogs 8:15 9:35 9:46 spotted leaves paws way too small compared to the leaf and the cut 10:02 Btw this is not meant to be hateful, I just saw that everybody is encouraging you and telling you that your arts very good but sometimes people have to tell you the flaws and give you constructive criticism, it seems that you are a very good artist and I respect that it’s just that by the end they are starting to get bad and more walkie, it happens to me when I get less motivated so if that’s the case, take a break, you don’t have to keep pushing through the whole time he could take weeks or months to make an animation of this length, as a person who has been working on drawing animal anatomy for over three years, I can say that you are better than a lot of animators that I’ve seen, but not the absolute best, your art style amazing, a lot like how I drew a year ago to 2 years ago,
Oh I didn’t notice, with Smallear's tongue I was gonna make it shorter but it ended up being long i tried fixing in production and this is how it turned out. I didn’t notice the other mistakes, but I’ll try my best to make ep 4 better.
i love the voice acting but the anatomy of the cats is kinda.. off? Also not to be that person but Bluestar didnt say "when I flick my tail, you cats start fighting" she just let them spar for honor and Graystripe didn't try to stop the battle.
I love this! The intro looks awesome! The animation is amazing! You also did great voice acting Spottedleaf! I’m happy to voice act as Smudge and Mousefur in this!
Grit job
Love it!
This is great!! I wish I could do something like this. I hope to see the rest!
WOW THIS IS GREAT!! im just gonna say GRAYSTRIPES VOICE FITS HIM PERFECTLY ❤❤
TYSSMMMMM Im his voice actor!
@@Imovedchannelsookkk WOW you did great then :D
Wow you did rilly good idk if u voced aced it but if u did good job I love it
This is amazing!
I'm almost done in book 1 and I see this as a great series
Girl- 11 minutes- omg, that's dedication! I loved the ep, great job! Can't wait for more!! Tell me if i need more lines btw ❤
Here are your lines for Ravenpaw since he appears first in the episode
(Panting/Scared/Stuttering)
We m-met some R-RiverClan warriors beside the stream, not far from the Sunnijgrocks, Oakheart w-was among them.
(Scared/Panting)
R-Redtail told Oakheart to keep h-his hunting p-parties out of ThunderClan territory, h-he said t-the next RiverClan warrior to be caught in Th-ThunderClan territory wound b-be killed. B-but Oakheart wound not b-back down, h-he said his clan had to be fed, whatever we threaten.
(Tired/Panting/Exhausted)
That’s when the warriors st-started to attack u-us. I-it was hard to see what a-was happening, th-the fighting w-was viscious. I saw Oakheart had Redtail on the ground and then…
(Passing out)
Redtail…Redtail…
(Tired)
I-is he gone?
(Shy)
B-bye.
@@LaylaAnimations24 Alright! I have so,e free time this morning so I'll do them :D
@@LaylaAnimations24 its in this playlist bc links dont work for me lol th-cam.com/play/PL_E7MiQ8FPn0Ju-yVFA8dCAlg_FU0FHLi.html&si=E69uG2l6YEKGKah9
Omg, the time this must have taken this is awesome
This was so awesome! Amazing job! The voice actors did such an amazing job! :D
this is awesome. i love the cats designs so much
This is amazing a love your art style is amazing :]
Graypaw: Uhh... DaRkStRiPe Hi
Why does he says it so awkwardly XD
Idk lol but I'm his voice actor!
AAA I REALLY LOVE THIS EPISODE!!
Wow! This turned out amazing!!! 🎉🎉🎉
wow great job! keep up the good work! cant wait to see the rest
This is awesome! You got a new sub!
That was awesome! I wish I can make a warrior cat series.
Also, me and my sister just got 2 fan art in Christmas. We’re so lucky!
Totally didn't forget to comment 😅. But I really liked the episode! Great job to you and the VA's!
I saw Sparron!
Where?
All times when proportions are incorrect:
0:40
2:17
3:01
3:05
3:21
3:47
4:04 (the gray cats tongue
4:10
4:19
5:25
6:34
6:49
7:04
7:21
7:39
7:48
7:51
8:02 blue stars head looks like it got ripped up by dogs
8:15
9:35
9:46 spotted leaves paws way too small compared to the leaf and the cut
10:02
Btw this is not meant to be hateful, I just saw that everybody is encouraging you and telling you that your arts very good but sometimes people have to tell you the flaws and give you constructive criticism, it seems that you are a very good artist and I respect that it’s just that by the end they are starting to get bad and more walkie, it happens to me when I get less motivated so if that’s the case, take a break, you don’t have to keep pushing through the whole time he could take weeks or months to make an animation of this length, as a person who has been working on drawing animal anatomy for over three years, I can say that you are better than a lot of animators that I’ve seen, but not the absolute best, your art style amazing, a lot like how I drew a year ago to 2 years ago,
Oh I didn’t notice, with Smallear's tongue I was gonna make it shorter but it ended up being long i tried fixing in production and this is how it turned out. I didn’t notice the other mistakes, but I’ll try my best to make ep 4 better.
this is awesome! :D is there anything special you did to make the characters slide for the intro?
you should change the eyes
I love Raven'paws design ❤
i love the voice acting but the anatomy of the cats is kinda.. off?
Also not to be that person but Bluestar didnt say "when I flick my tail, you cats start fighting" she just let them spar for honor and Graystripe didn't try to stop the battle.
I made changes because of the copyright thing so if you don’t like them deal with it. And thank you
@@LaylaAnimations24 ah ok that makes sense, thanks for the reply