This is novel. Writing a fan fiction in process?! But there's a flaw. Blonde says sorry didn't want to wake the dark haired one. But....the blonde knocks like how many times on the door to wake the other up. This is seen as doesn't want to bother?! Hear a couple of aspirin, panadol tablets will sort it out. Just don't make the blonde a cop that's all 😅
Suggest something? Ever thought of joining a creative writing course? It might help to tighten up parts that could do with being shorter. The music is distracting. If you're doing drama, then use a bit of music here & there. Doesn't have to be a song, just an extract of an instrumental piece. But music should fit into the feel of the scene you're depicting. Instead the non-stop upbeat popular genres are fighting with the need to focus on the words.
Im not a pro writer/author so im not good at writing ffstory and my english grammar is so poor😢😂 and music? I just put the songs that I love, bcoz i don’t care if it fits or not bcoz im busy too with my other work to find songs to fit in my story. But thank you for the comment, appreciate much!🥰
@Cs_Aqua98 Ok, so you're doing this as a bit of fun rather than with any serious intentions to develop the work beyond that? Then that's fine. I'm a trained artist & had to learn to accept feedback from fellow students. Also, as an interest, did a couple of short writing courses. Again, we had to share our efforts regularly & receive feedback. It's a method, tho painful @ times, as a way to improve. Others can see stuff we can't, cos we're too close to it. Anyway, as you're treating it as fun... I'll leave you to get on with it. By the way, grammar isn't the issue. Stories grab continuous reader attention - from it's plot development. So, there wasn't any need to apologise. I was only giving feedback cos I thought you wanted to be a (budding) writer. Cheers from UK.
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This is novel. Writing a fan fiction in process?! But there's a flaw. Blonde says sorry didn't want to wake the dark haired one. But....the blonde knocks like how many times on the door to wake the other up. This is seen as doesn't want to bother?! Hear a couple of aspirin, panadol tablets will sort it out. Just don't make the blonde a cop that's all 😅
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Suggest something? Ever thought of joining a creative writing course? It might help to tighten up parts that could do with being shorter. The music is distracting. If you're doing drama, then use a bit of music here & there. Doesn't have to be a song, just an extract of an instrumental piece. But music should fit into the feel of the scene you're depicting. Instead the non-stop upbeat popular genres are fighting with the need to focus on the words.
Im not a pro writer/author so im not good at writing ffstory and my english grammar is so poor😢😂 and music? I just put the songs that I love, bcoz i don’t care if it fits or not bcoz im busy too with my other work to find songs to fit in my story. But thank you for the comment, appreciate much!🥰
@Cs_Aqua98 Ok, so you're doing this as a bit of fun rather than with any serious intentions to develop the work beyond that? Then that's fine. I'm a trained artist & had to learn to accept feedback from fellow students. Also, as an interest, did a couple of short writing courses. Again, we had to share our efforts regularly & receive feedback. It's a method, tho painful @ times, as a way to improve. Others can see stuff we can't, cos we're too close to it. Anyway, as you're treating it as fun... I'll leave you to get on with it. By the way, grammar isn't the issue. Stories grab continuous reader attention - from it's plot development. So, there wasn't any need to apologise. I was only giving feedback cos I thought you wanted to be a (budding) writer. Cheers from UK.