I can’t imagine how the father must have felt hearing that from his child. Do you think he believed the warning right away, or did he think it was just a misunderstanding? What do you think he’ll do next-confront her, or investigate further?
No epilogue! What happened to James? What about the underhanded deals he made without Andrew's knowledge? How did Lori escape? What was Lori's sentence? Too many unanswered questions!! For a story that ran FAR TOO LONG, it really didn't end like it should have!! Definite thumbs down on this one!
Even a child shall lead them. Andrew was blinded by love that he was oblivious of the danger. It was a good thing Clara was a strong, proactive, determined and observant daughter. She did the detective work. Laurie bit the dust this time.
Editing of this story is so bad,esp the last part,how can lorry cut the beake of the car,when she is detained in the police,,,and follow them to the cabin,,,,OMG,,,then after moving home,,3 yrs passed,David is 11 yrs old, and Clara is 19',,,,hmmmmmm😮start of the story David is 10 and Clara is 17,,,,,hmmmmmmm😮😮😮😮
Why don’t Clara mention about her discovery at her dad’s office about the documents, that very important issue to miss and would have shed light immediately.
How could the police be aware that Laurie was planning to escape and still let her succeed in her plan. The police also suggested that Laurie could tamper with the car brakes. How come they didn't think of that before getting into the car? I don't know whether it's just my over analytical mind that sometimes I find that the narration leaves a lot to be desired in these stories. And when did she tamper with the brakes since she was supposedly in police custody? Clara was seventeen at the beginning of the story and after three years she was nineteen! David was ten and after three years he was eleven! And I've not heard about "Dad don't get in the car,. The new mum cut the brakes ". I've not heard where any of the children said that at all and even where a torn picture was found.
Why would they use the car after being warned by the police of possible sabotage to it? Why does the father let his 16 or 17 year old daughter take the lead? How did Laurie escape? There is repetition cutting in and dragging the story back over something in an annoying or strange way.
One should always follow your instinct like Clara thought about Laury. Clara investigation about Laury led to her shady passed laboit the deaths of 2 of herhusbands and led to her being arrested. She follow her instinct which was provened to be correct. A new start in a different city as been good for Andrew and his chilfrrn. Happy 11th birthday David lonh lige and happiness.😊❤❤❤
Smart girl her determination very admirable.i really do enjoy these types of stories from this specific narrator.there may be some mistakes in the story however he is forgiven.stories I really enjoy unlike those obnoxious bullshit.good job to the writers n narrators.
Too many inconsistencies, too many repetitive uses of terminology and the father is portrayed as far too naive and clueless to be a successful businessman. If it were not for these discrepancies and, if there had been some actual closure, it would have been a decent thirty minute story; too bad it took nearly two hours to tell it!
Going forward review story narrative before creating the verbal narrative and video. - It seemed that after Andrew finally believed Clara, he should of hired a private investigator for info on Lori and James. Plus, have an audit business transactions, especially James. - There are other issues in the narrative as listed on other comments.
This story should have been an amazing story however, the writer /writers messed up rather badly I suggest them go back and find all the gaps and flaws in this waste of space they call a story. Do better next time.
The stepmom is a great actress. She's totally fooled her husband. The daughter had
a good intuition. She was very sensitive.🎉🎉❤❤😅 GREAT STORY
Excellent , the daughter was. The best, ❤
It is a pity that the story portrayed the father as spineless here. It was only Clara decided mostly for the family.
What courage that young lady has
i loved this story be nice to see a part 2 maybe a part 3
GOD part I is in itself a big bore who wants to see the 2/3.part.
I can’t imagine how the father must have felt hearing that from his child. Do you think he believed the warning right away, or did he think it was just a misunderstanding? What do you think he’ll do next-confront her, or investigate further?
No epilogue! What happened to James? What about the underhanded deals he made without Andrew's knowledge? How did Lori escape? What was Lori's sentence? Too many unanswered questions!! For a story that ran FAR TOO LONG, it really didn't end like it should have!! Definite thumbs down on this one!
Why don’t Clara tell her father about James, does she think her father is that stupid?
Even a child shall lead them. Andrew was blinded by love that he was oblivious of the danger. It was a good thing Clara was a strong, proactive, determined and observant daughter. She did the detective work. Laurie bit the dust this time.
Is Andrew that naive that He can not even see what is right 8n front of him how awful and hard to believe that a busseness man seems to be so naive
When this story started, David was 10 & Clara was 17.
The Author said 3 years passed however, David is only 11 & Clara is 19.
Very poorly written storyline. The characters and scenarios are disconnected with the timelines
Editing of this story is so bad,esp the last part,how can lorry cut the beake of the car,when she is detained in the police,,,and follow them to the cabin,,,,OMG,,,then after moving home,,3 yrs passed,David is 11 yrs old, and Clara is 19',,,,hmmmmmm😮start of the story David is 10 and Clara is 17,,,,,hmmmmmmm😮😮😮😮
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LAURIE DIDNT FOLLOW THEM N THE CABIN POLICE FOUND LAURIE ELSEWHERE & WAS APREHENDED
Computers is suppose to be excellent but AI is not.
Maybe they should go to Google.
Why don’t Clara mention about her discovery at her dad’s office about the documents, that very important issue to miss and would have shed light immediately.
How could the police be aware that Laurie was planning to escape and still let her succeed in her plan. The police also suggested that Laurie could tamper with the car brakes. How come they didn't think of that before getting into the car? I don't know whether it's just my over analytical mind that sometimes I find that the narration leaves a lot to be desired in these stories. And when did she tamper with the brakes since she was supposedly in police custody?
Clara was seventeen at the beginning of the story and after three years she was nineteen! David was ten and after three years he was eleven!
And I've not heard about "Dad don't get in the car,. The new mum cut the brakes ". I've not heard where any of the children said that at all and even where a torn picture was found.
Thank God for his daughter when children see something and feel something. We gotta listen. I know this is a story, but guess what it happened in life
So clever Clara!
Yeess!!😍
a beautiful story, he was lucky to escape death because he had a lovely daughter, a cruel mother.
Who is the grownup here? Clara or Andrew? He should have gone to the police.
I loved it very much!
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Why is Clara doing all the moves and not the father I don’t understand, is dad really that feeble minded in this story?😂
Spineless dad
Why would they use the car after being warned by the police of possible sabotage to it? Why does the father let his 16 or 17 year old daughter take the lead? How did Laurie escape? There is repetition cutting in and dragging the story back over something in an annoying or strange way.
The fight was far from over again and again.
Great story!!
Why can’t they use the phone and always ask Clara to come to police station.
I need to know what happened to James 🤔.
Beautiful story though..Clara is a great detective ❤❤❤❤
start of the story David is 10 and Clara is 17,
Why Clara doesn’t communicate her father about Lori took David away, this not make any sense.
Great story but how did she escape from custody? They kept spelling laurie name n they didnt arrest james otherwise a good story.
Why does a child have to take charge. Where is the fathers input.
Clara is a smart & perceptive than her father👍! But the story is long😂!
Don’t they check the car brakes before getting inside, getting more ridiculous.😂
Is there a part 2 if needed a little more what became of James? Good story though
Why didn't they check the dang brakes on the car?
Why would they leave david with lorrie
That should have been child endangerment.
One should always follow your instinct like Clara thought about Laury. Clara investigation about Laury led to her shady passed laboit the deaths of 2 of herhusbands and led to her being arrested. She follow her instinct which was provened to be correct. A new start in a different city as been good for Andrew and his chilfrrn. Happy 11th birthday David lonh lige and happiness.😊❤❤❤
They have a mansion, surely they can afford a good hotel.
It's a good story but very drawn out. Also too many repetitions.😢
It seems Andrew is portrayed as a weakling and Clara is the heroine I cant believe this kind of story
What happened to James has he been courted as well
Smart girl her determination very admirable.i really do enjoy these types of stories from this specific narrator.there may be some mistakes in the story however he is forgiven.stories I really enjoy unlike those obnoxious bullshit.good job to the writers n narrators.
May love be with them always ❤
Too many inconsistencies, too many repetitive uses of terminology and the father is portrayed as far too naive and clueless to be a successful businessman. If it were not for these discrepancies and, if there had been some actual closure, it would have been a decent thirty minute story; too bad it took nearly two hours to tell it!
Really Beautiful Story
Many many thanks
T
😂😊❤ lovely
Going forward review story narrative before creating the verbal narrative and video. - It seemed that after Andrew finally believed Clara, he should of hired a private investigator for info on Lori and James. Plus, have an audit business transactions, especially James.
- There are other issues in the narrative as listed on other comments.
This story should have been an amazing story however, the writer /writers messed up rather badly I suggest them go back and find all the gaps and flaws in this waste of space they call a story. Do better next time.
Clara should have first and foremost informed the police when she found the handwritten note of Lauri.
Wow, that's an intense moment! What do you think the father should do next? 👀
Isn’t the father a millionaire
How pathetic that he can’t protect his own family
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Story to long!!!
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Clara, you earned the role of the woman of the house
3 years after the death of Andrew's wife is too early to marry 2nd wife.
Very bad script of the story because Clara and Andrew did not check the car's break and Andrew seemed to be a very stupid person.
This story was a bit mixed up two many mistakes and contradictions sorry mona
What happened to James?
Too too too long and repetious, very very boring g. 1:27:44