This stuff really reminds me of how stuck i am in writing music i always feel the need for something complex im pretty ignorant to that. This was truly beautiful
They noticed I don't smile anymore, It's unfortunate how long it took. The light that once danced in my eyes, Now lost in pages of a forgotten book. Whispers of joy fade with time's cruel mark, As shadows deepen where brightness once stood. Yet within, a hope still quietly burns, A spark, waiting for its moment to be understood.
It reminds me of the slow days going home from school and hearing a good song from a distance, not knowing what the song exactly is, but just being in the moment and thinking about the things I wanna become in the future. I don't know why that's how I felt about this.
That's a really cool riff! I checked out a few of your videos and I love the unique vibe you've created in your songs. It kind of reminds me of Deftones. I'd suggest taking inspiration from Radiohead and The Smiths. The way Greenwood and Marr play and use the guitar would really suit your songs. It's totally fine to take influences from other artists, but never lose your own rhythm. You've got something really special going on. I'll definitely give your song a listen
i usually don't listen to emo music cause i don't like being sad but this song was different great work reminds me of need 2 even tho it sounds nothing like it
One day you’ll look at your reflection and find every expressive look beautiful, even if you haven’t found your smile in its truth yet you’re seeking beauty and you’ll find it when you know yourself !
@@totallynotaly by the way there’s an abusive devil I’m fighting with my life he’s all over the world so pray if you’re religious or I’ll pray for you !
It's really nice, I randomly found you bc you left a comment on one of bea's posts lol. Your guitar might be buzzing from humidity changes? I noticed mine does that sometimes...
oh this might be dumb, please do be careful, but the way I fixed my guitar buzz was to tighten the nuts that are where the strings are on the head. Might not work but it worked for me. Whenever your changing strings is the best time to do it because with strings its annoying lol, doable if your willing to slack your strings by a lot. Lovely instrumental piece! Happy playing
Last chord in that progression might not be fully in key, specifically the note on the low e string. In my mind it keeps trying to go a fret up, so maybe consider sliding that up one fret with the current note being used in passing? Also very nice ending and resolution at the end
@@bleh132bleh i just used some chords i found. i will google “good chords for shoegaze” or stuff like that and then i’ll move the chord around until i think it sounds good and just do that till i have a progression
@@totallynotaly I'm gonna be honest, you've really inspired me to start uploading my own music. I'd like to show bits of random videos and pictures, mixed with music and poetry
@@totallynotaly don't be I hope you smile at least once again in the future, I am certain your smile is beautiful, I mean I know it is sinciere bc otherwise you would still smile, am I wrong? stay safe, also good luck on your guitar journey
Sounds good! I am a beginner at guitar and i usually just freestyle what i do but it always sounds good also, an artist from Missouri and i have always wabted to collab with a woman let me know and we can figure something out.
@@soulayeebonus2438 sometimes i just mess with chords until i find a cool sound. this one i know i used em then a random chord and then a chord similar to f. i hope that helps!!
the chords u used are really unsetteling and are just a fraction of what they should sound like by the music rules but it fits the title perfectly. Good job
@@totallynotaly How did you make up a chord? I've been trying to do that as well but it just sounds bad. Like did you experiment around with what sounds good, maybe some music theory?
@@rak3sh.mtheory definitely helps, but as a beginner i used to just play with shapes and see what worked, also paying atention to which notes felt wrong and why they sounded like that to raise them or lower them. If u just play around you will find interesting stuff, u dont need to know theory to know if something sounds good. tho its definitely recommended to understand what you are actually doing and why it sounds the way it does
@@rak3sh.m i just used a basic chord and moved some things around like sometimes ill put it on a different fret or add a finger to a different string to create a unique chord. also i dont know music theory i just go by ear and see what sounds good.
U should deffo try to play and sing. I've been forced into it after picking up guitar for a month n I'm a shit guitarist but it's so cool, highly recommend
@@totallynotaly having a mate who u can play with really really helps. ive found myself just recording myself n listening back, it hurts to hear myself but its how u improve hahaha
Best of luck with your songwriting wow, this shit is unique. The best song i’ve ever written is called “The World In My Vermillion” do you like the sound of that?
@@totallynotaly i feel really awkward, i'm really missing her. But i don't have confidience to text her. When i just realize what i did to her... i didn't know i was broking her. I just wanna take it back and love her as much as i could, i wish i could say my feelings, i just scared. For some reason, i just kept my feeling in my inside. Now i can't stop thinking her, i just wanna get lost in her eyes, in her hair. I just wanna be yell that how much i love her, but now.. i'm just waiting,
@@johnhaileycastrodes8528 so i don’t really remember cause this was kinda a freestyle but i used e minor and c but the other chords i’m not sure i’m sorry
@@totallynotaly I'm the same as u with this kinda stuff, from strumming pattern to timing, it's never gonna get better without a metronome. Learned it the hard way
This stuff really reminds me of how stuck i am in writing music i always feel the need for something complex im pretty ignorant to that. This was truly beautiful
thankyouuu im sure you will make some good music!!
Sometimes all you need is the heart and the will, brother.
so real!
Real bro
I feel like that a lot, but u should just write stuff even if u think it's bad. You got to let the dirty water come out before any good can come
They noticed I don't smile anymore,
It's unfortunate how long it took.
The light that once danced in my eyes,
Now lost in pages of a forgotten book.
Whispers of joy fade with time's cruel mark,
As shadows deepen where brightness once stood.
Yet within, a hope still quietly burns,
A spark, waiting for its moment to be understood.
@@Swarthy. that’s beautiful!!
@@totallynotaly thank you so much! And your music is absolutely amazing!
@@Swarthy. aww thankyou!!!
that is so beautiful
@@littlebatbigheart your soul is beautiful
It reminds me of the slow days going home from school and hearing a good song from a distance, not knowing what the song exactly is, but just being in the moment and thinking about the things I wanna become in the future.
I don't know why that's how I felt about this.
thats sounds like a very interesting feeling
the buzzing adds character imo 🖤
lol thankyou
This was fuckin cool, man! It reminded me of smashing pumpkins in how mellow their songs are.
@@ct-lyricist0311 ohh thankyouu i love the smashing pumpkins
You can honestly be a poet. You’re titles are also cool.
@@b.136 aww thankyou i like writing but i typically only write lyrics
Yeah she would be a good poet and musician 😅
@@Forgottenchannel129 thankyouuu
Songs basically are poetry, poetry behind a melody
@@AriEsFea true dat
some great shoegaze potential with this riff and an electric guitar + some cheap pedals
@@Fraddoo thankyouuu
This feels like 2010 but it’s only three weeks old and I absolutely love it
@@Rainbow-Coffee ohh yasss
ngl you are my literal motivation to keep playing my guitar. keep going sis
yayy im glad, thankyouuu
this is absolutely gorgeous. it feels like just what i was missing today
@@bruh2843 thankyou i’m glad you liked it!!
That's a really cool riff! I checked out a few of your videos and I love the unique vibe you've created in your songs. It kind of reminds me of Deftones. I'd suggest taking inspiration from Radiohead and The Smiths. The way Greenwood and Marr play and use the guitar would really suit your songs. It's totally fine to take influences from other artists, but never lose your own rhythm. You've got something really special going on. I'll definitely give your song a listen
yes i do love deftones and the smiths!! ill listen to the other artists too tho. i take inspiration from alot of other artists too. thankyou!!!
please you glide through your chords so much quicker than I do oml. This is awesome!
@@taddamarie it just takes practice don’t worry 💕
i usually don't listen to emo music cause i don't like being sad but this song was different great work reminds me of need 2 even tho it sounds nothing like it
Very warm feeling if that makes sense. Keep up the good work! :P
@@TheJudge287 thankyou!!!
Your titles are really relatable
@@Forgottenchannel129 thankyou so much!!
This is probably one of my favorite things I've heard from you! I could imagine some synthy strings in the background and airy reverby vocals.
@@jonmashburn6228 ohh thankyou!! and that does seem cool
love how simple this is
im glad!
bro what this is so good!? and your actually gorgeous
@@stopmotionmayzie thankyouuuu
……So beautiful sounds💛💚
Thank you for comfortable time🧡
I'm looking forward to seeing you again🤍❤️
@@Kaeruya. thankyou, im glad!!
I hate doing work but I feel useless when I’m being lazy
oh im sorry
This is really good! I think the buzzing adds life and emotion, cause like it's not perfect and imperfections are realistic (I love music 😭)
@@jakubisblue awww yea that’s a nice way to look at it!! me tooo
I love that your titles tell a story and I really empathize with you.
@@cmor95 aw thankyou!!
@@totallynotaly
UNDERRATED ASFFFF
loved the guitar 🖤
ps - ur GORGEOUS
@@teatea119 thankyou so muchhh!! 🖤
you’re really talented
@@hours4935 thankyou!!
One day you’ll look at your reflection and find every expressive look beautiful, even if you haven’t found your smile in its truth yet you’re seeking beauty and you’ll find it when you know yourself !
@@user-hz4pr5ls7p aww that’s beautiful thankyou!!
@@totallynotaly hey in Youre completion you are profound if you ever need me I’m here
@@totallynotaly by the way there’s an abusive devil I’m fighting with my life he’s all over the world so pray if you’re religious or I’ll pray for you !
And the angels are with you by the way
This is some great stuff! Good songwriting skills. Love it!
thankyou so muchh
would you be able to tell me what you recorded this on? (also this is amazing, great job!!)
i just used my phone to record, thankyouu
Some of the best stuff ive seen so far.Great job!!!
@@foultarnished17 thankyou!!
this is so good i love seeing music like this :D
thankyou im glad!!
It's really nice, I randomly found you bc you left a comment on one of bea's posts lol. Your guitar might be buzzing from humidity changes? I noticed mine does that sometimes...
@@HalcyonSmyle omggg you’re a bea fan?!! maybe that’s why im not really sure tho
oh this might be dumb, please do be careful, but the way I fixed my guitar buzz was to tighten the nuts that are where the strings are on the head. Might not work but it worked for me. Whenever your changing strings is the best time to do it because with strings its annoying lol, doable if your willing to slack your strings by a lot. Lovely instrumental piece! Happy playing
ohh thankyou for the advice ill keep that in mind!! thankyou
@totallynotaly glad to help 😊
This is so good. It kinda reminds me of Alex g and corbon amodio and many other artist ❤
@@sodapop8005 ohh thankyou!!
@@totallynotaly yw
@@totallynotaly I'm gonna need this on Spotify 😓🫶
@@sodapop8005 sooonnn
What tuning?
E standard
Sounds like standard. They use normal chord shapes with their fingers but slide it down a few frets to make it kind of dissonant,
Keep it up my friend, you'll be big not in popularity but big on how you represent your creativity, I truly hope the best on your journey.
I appreciate that!
I really love this! Is this your own piece, and if so may i improvise on top of it for my channel?
@@ChaceComp thankyou! and yes it is an original of mine, i’m not really comfortable with other people using my music right now i’m sorry
@totallynotaly That is totally fine, can't wait for you to start churning out masterpieces man :)
That sound good, keep going I believe you can become really good :>
thankyou so much!!!
Last chord in that progression might not be fully in key, specifically the note on the low e string. In my mind it keeps trying to go a fret up, so maybe consider sliding that up one fret with the current note being used in passing?
Also very nice ending and resolution at the end
@@nathan_amato i will try that. thankyou for the advice!!
this reminds me of melanie Martinez’s guide to music 💗 this deserves sm more attention !!
@@kalogerhas thankyouuuu
keep speaking through music, love it. i will always wait for ur next content^^
@@timefrozen i will and thankyou i’m glad!!
love this!!
@@imnotavaaa yayy i’m glad!!
ur so pretty and this title is so sjrnsjdkwlrjnekwjd i love
@@avaistall thankyou so muchhh
yooooo, smash pumpkins, you have good taste.
you are a legend
@@0zeromnuelzunig i love the smashing pumpkinsss!! thankyou!!
So amazing👏 I’m so proud of you!
@@WarFox7012 awww yayyyy ❤️
beautiful
Thank you!
I'm trying to figure out what you were thinking with these chords. In all genuineness. I wonder if you are able to explain them to me?
@@bleh132bleh i just used some chords i found. i will google “good chords for shoegaze” or stuff like that and then i’ll move the chord around until i think it sounds good and just do that till i have a progression
Congrats! I'm yours 1000th subscriber.🎇🎆🎊🎉🥳
@@nikolastanic2999 omgggg thankyouuuuu
@@totallynotaly thank you for lovely content. Keep it going!
@@nikolastanic2999 thankyou so much!!! i hope you have a great day!! 🖤
THIS IS SO GOOD OH MY GOODNESS!!!
THANKYOUU
hell yeah, that great man.
@@tincansailor5436 thankyou so much
i love the acoustic songs sooooooo
@@dadoggydude yayy i’m glad you like them!!
wait this is original? this is beautiful. i was almost about to go and search for the original song...
yea it is an original!!
Tutorial plz 😢
Hi, aly, do you like Circa Survive?? Spirit of the Stairwell??
@@ChristianVespucci i haven’t heard of them but i will listen to them
🖤
@@WRLDOfSad 🖤
You should mix some Gs Cs and Fs into that. New song that’d incorporate the dissonant chords more.
Do you write lyrics? Reminds me of some of my music
@@SuzukiHalwende yea i do write lyrics i just don’t put them out as often
@@totallynotaly I'm gonna be honest, you've really inspired me to start uploading my own music. I'd like to show bits of random videos and pictures, mixed with music and poetry
@@SuzukiHalwende aw i’m glad i would definitely look at that
I feel you
@@Neiro_Kaiten im sorry
@@totallynotaly don't be I hope you smile at least once again in the future, I am certain your smile is beautiful, I mean I know it is sinciere bc otherwise you would still smile, am I wrong? stay safe, also good luck on your guitar journey
@@Neiro_Kaiten aw i hope you smile and stay happy!! i’m sure your smile is also beautiful. thankyou!! and i hope you have a great day!!
This is really nice :)
thankyouuu
Lovely 👏👏
thankyouu
beautiful
im not looking to collab with anyone right now im sorry
Sounds good! I am a beginner at guitar and i usually just freestyle what i do but it always sounds good also, an artist from Missouri and i have always wabted to collab with a woman let me know and we can figure something out.
that sounds amazing 🤘
@@jdhsh833uu4 thankyouuu
I've been trying to copy your fingering for each chord this is actually impossible help😭
@@soulayeebonus2438 sometimes i just mess with chords until i find a cool sound. this one i know i used em then a random chord and then a chord similar to f. i hope that helps!!
@@totallynotaly I'll try that thank you
o-m-g
this is awesome :D
@@lukebrown2498 thankyou!!
i think i fell in love
nice username lol
SOOOO GOOD!
@@Not_Mathie THANKYOUUU!!
the chords u used are really unsetteling and are just a fraction of what they should sound like by the music rules but it fits the title perfectly. Good job
@@blazicky thankyou!
so good bro
@@metalpunkergrrrl thankyouu
Can you please make tabs
yes i will soon
tbh i think the buzzing sounds pretty good
@@Inorepotatoes141 maybeee
What are chords
can i use this?
for youre own song?
yeah
@@mattsinanotherworld yea just give me credit please
@@totallynotalyyes ma'am
just started learning acoustic, can I get the chords for this?
so this one is a little special because i kinda "created my own chords" but the only chord i didnt makeup was em in that song
@@totallynotaly thanks, i think i'll try and follow along to the video best I can
@@totallynotaly How did you make up a chord? I've been trying to do that as well but it just sounds bad. Like did you experiment around with what sounds good, maybe some music theory?
@@rak3sh.mtheory definitely helps, but as a beginner i used to just play with shapes and see what worked, also paying atention to which notes felt wrong and why they sounded like that to raise them or lower them. If u just play around you will find interesting stuff, u dont need to know theory to know if something sounds good.
tho its definitely recommended to understand what you are actually doing and why it sounds the way it does
@@rak3sh.m i just used a basic chord and moved some things around like sometimes ill put it on a different fret or add a finger to a different string to create a unique chord. also i dont know music theory i just go by ear and see what sounds good.
What tuning are you using?
@@richiemyoozik e standard
I NEED TABSSSSS
U should deffo try to play and sing. I've been forced into it after picking up guitar for a month n I'm a shit guitarist but it's so cool, highly recommend
@@ergotfungus4684 i’ve tried singing in a few of my past songs and imma try more in the future. it’s kinda difficult for me idk why
@@totallynotaly having a mate who u can play with really really helps. ive found myself just recording myself n listening back, it hurts to hear myself but its how u improve hahaha
@@ergotfungus4684 yea that would make sense lol. ill try to do that more
Soon reaching 1000🎉
ik my goal is by the end of the month!!
aura
Nice work
thanks!!
Best of luck with your songwriting wow, this shit is unique. The best song i’ve ever written is called “The World In My Vermillion” do you like the sound of that?
thankyou and no i havent heard of that song but i will listen to it
How do you feeling rn?
@@xfxpositions how are you??
@@totallynotaly i feel really awkward, i'm really missing her. But i don't have confidience to text her. When i just realize what i did to her... i didn't know i was broking her. I just wanna take it back and love her as much as i could, i wish i could say my feelings, i just scared. For some reason, i just kept my feeling in my inside. Now i can't stop thinking her, i just wanna get lost in her eyes, in her hair. I just wanna be yell that how much i love her, but now.. i'm just waiting,
@@xfxpositions aw i’m so sorry, i’m
sure whatever you do it’ll all be okay!!
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nice
@@Sherbert941 thanks!!
yo i kinda wanna make a beat out of this... that cool?
yea thats fine, if you upload it give me credit please
@@totallynotaly thank you so much
What chords do you use?
@@johnhaileycastrodes8528 so i don’t really remember cause this was kinda a freestyle but i used e minor and c but the other chords i’m not sure i’m sorry
sigma
They noticed I unskibidied
oh im sorry
im stealing this chord progression if u allow me
please dont steal my chord progression
@@totallynotaly Aite bet but can I make a song out of this I like the progression
u remind me of ellie from tlou 2
ive gotten that before lol thankyou
Similar to nick drake keep it up
@@Geto456 thankyou
S-s-d-$-SOMEBODY DOESN'T USE A METRONOME!!
@@DaniDavid-sd2xe i don’t use a metronome for these, i’m sorry
@@totallynotaly I'm the same as u with this kinda stuff, from strumming pattern to timing, it's never gonna get better without a metronome. Learned it the hard way
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Why not?
uh idk
Want to do a collab?
im not looking to collab with anyone right now, im sorryy
really??? i didn't know
any tabs?
i havent made tabs for it
@@totallynotaly any chance u will?
@@totallynotaly or what tuning it is in?
@@bruhbruh-id5xu e standard
@@totallynotaly thx
421st like, I'm late dangit
@@ChristianVespucci lol it’s okay and thankyou for liking!!
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA OMG
@@_sunflowerxlu OMGGGGGGGGGG MY QUEENNNNN
@@totallynotaly OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG 💓💓
That was really touching, honestly. would you ever see yourself joining a band or anything? you got mad talent.
i would love to be in a band, im currently working on producing my own songs right now tho!! thankyouu
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