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J.JK Oneshot: When you start falling for an idol | Jungkook ff
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- เผยแพร่เมื่อ 27 มิ.ย. 2022
- An agonizing love story🥀
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18+. Contains mature themes such as sexual content and very sensitive topics that may trigger some people. Please do not read if that makes you feel uncomfortable.
This is a fan-fiction, purpose that all incidents and occasions in this are all imaginary and all are portion of my imagination. Any resemblance to substantial life events and species, living or dead, are all purely coincidence.
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This was so well written. I've read many FF, so I'm not just saying these things.
A ...few comments from a writer's perspective...
It's nice to see some original ideas here, and I can tell you put lots of thought into Yn and Jk's situation.
You did the brave thing and married them off, gave them a very nice low-key 'real' relationship, and allowed them to experience some of the things we'd expect them to deal with based on the nature of their careers.
It would have been challenging to fill in more of the dynamic between his label and them regarding the marriage conflict as that would make things very messy, so I think you did the right thing on only touching on it - and then letting it go for other more pertinent issues.
You did a great job on the decision of how much interaction there was between Yn and the full BTS crew. Often as not when all the boys have some involvement in the plot, they are consistently interacting with the mains, but you didn't do that at all outside of work. Keeping things simple and clean. (I learned something from your technique..)
Funny enough, I've a few thoughts related to the interview scene....
* I wasn't expecting JK's all-out confession to the interviewer, and his reaction when he came home knowing he needed to confess to Yn what happened was good too. The fact that a third party did the revelation for them...was brilliantly played. Saved time but did what had to be done.
* Adding the interview the way you did worked well. Again, you touched on your topic, but in such a way you didn't have to directly interact between JK and the host. Usually, with scripts the rule of thumb is 'show not tell' but in yours, you've proven that sometimes telling vs showing is much more appropriate. I really liked that.
* You knew that something or someone had to finally 'out' their relationship, and I wondered how this would impact their story. You chose to just graze on the topic, but not flesh that aspect out. I was on the fence about that because while I liked how you did it, there was this big part of me burning to see what some of the fallout would look like after the big confession, but I get that you were trying to keep to just the two of them as much as possible. The less third-party interaction the easier it is to roll out the plot cleanly.
* You didn't specifically touch on the fact that her ex was probably the catalyst who took the pics and released them directly, but that was my assumption from how you explained where the pics were taken. A wee bit more interaction between JK and her ex, could have perhaps added a bit more tension, but I felt you weren't going for that type of 'drama' with this FF.
The suicide scene was tricky, but you jumped right in there, addressing the topic with sensitivity and a decent amount of reality. You Let us know she'd been suffering a long time and struggling with her place in the world so we didn't just think she suddenly started acting unbalanced. When JK ...saved the day, you made us feel that this would be a HEA. I loved the intervention with the phone call, for a few reasons, the obvious above, but as well, you'd already opened the door to JK's unique connection he'd built her. 'I had to call. I had a feeling.' Making the graveyard scene more believable.
I admit, you had me concerned with the final bedroom scene when she was promising JK to always be beside him no matter what, when by then - even though she didn't officially know it - she knew she was about to pass on, so I was confused about that statement - why she'd say it... but...You fooled us didn't you?
My goodness the grave scenes there...
Now that was good. How you flashed to the fact that JK was loyally going to her grave every day between a certain time was interesting. Again, you used a third party to tell us how he'd been behaving, saving you a lot of time and effort, but making things crystal clear that there was something going on with JK that was out of the norm... (we're thinking every day...for years?? Poor JK.)
It's not that this scenario hasn't been done before, but you did it in a very tender, and empathetic way and it was unique.
As this scene unfolds, part of me wanted to to go... poor JK - he's lost it and going to see ghosts the rest of his life and needs therapy, but on the other side, I was all bent over in awwwww's because his undying love for his wife drove him to her grave every night. (Wouldn't any ARMY married to him love that kind of devotion?)
You have them interacting physically at the graveyard, which I was slightly challenged as to how that would look to the caretakers ...
The interaction between them at the graveyard relating to her to telling him to adopt children for them...very interesting and I'm not sure I've seen that used in that context before, but what better way to ensure he can still keep true to his loyalty to her,( which if he's been going there every night at a certain time for years...it's doubtful he will ever have another intimate love his life.) but allow him to start living toward something other than their paranormal relationship by keeping him busy with some kids was well done, and probably the only way to have him commit to any other form of emotional relationship.
Up til the graveyard scene, there were no unrealistic over-the-top scenes, and you made both characters very mature, but you made Yn vulnerable and believable, and you managed to convince us that it was sad but okay that Yn dies because she never left him alone, and the intensity she'd used to get that point to him before she died...and the fact that she backs that up at her grave every single day.
You brought up some good topic matter that Idols face. I can't believe how good you were with keeping the third-party issues out... ie interactions between ARMY relating to their relationship and the other situations mentioned above. It had to be challenging deciding just how much omissions you could get away with, without hurting the story.
You put in just the right amount of hints about her health so as to not give away just how sick she was, but enough so we didn't go...oh... you just killed her off ' just cuz.'
And you touched on her fear of hospitals, and why she'd not sought medical advice with her headaches being a long-term problem for her. I almost forgot we see her first one during the first scene.
I even appreciated some of your background choices. The cityscape was very nice, and different from what most FF writers start off their stories with, which immediately perked my interest. I knew from that point, that you were thinking outside the box. (That may seem a weird thing to say, but it's what I'd thought.)
So, I wrote that all out because those were all thoughts that came to mind when I watched this. I don't often do these types of commentaries and hope you don't mind that I did and hope it gives you a good feeling hearing someone's perspective of your work.
I enjoyed this very much and will be checking out some of your other work on your channel...and of course, subscribe to your channel 💝💝💝💝
Let me tell you one thing your statement made my day💕
I read each word of your incredible comment, and I was smiling like an idiot the whole while reading it.
This story was in my mind during March, but I knew it was a damn long movie rather than a small Oneshot, I kept it aside for a while because I had this in mind that the female lead will die in the end...
This was a simple love story that mainly focused on the girl’s side to make it more reasonable for the ending.
Yn grew up with financial problems because her father worked hard for his 3 children to give them a better future he had tons of dreams for them because her grandfather had passed away when her father was only 16, and after that her mother didn't really loved the oldest child but the youngest three. So the female lead’s father always wanted to give his best to his children with love care and everything.
She fell for someone and that someone kept dismissing her love.
But when she had enough she was sure she had to let go and some random song playing on youtube encouraged her.
She became an ARMY because bts’ songs healed her heart!
She then takes place filling for a friend of her mother, but she mainly worked for bts, and yn needed that as well so for sure applied for that.
When she meets them everyone was even more tender than she saw in the videos, but one man was making her heartbeat fast that was her bias.
And for jungkook, he loved the girl the moment he started noticing her gleaming face and her shyness and her being strong enough to work as much as she could with a load of work.
He started developing sentiments for her and wanted her to know that he was to do that to America when asked her to come as well but when she canceled it at the last moment this made the boy heartbroken.
Because he was to confess his feelings.
For yn, she was acting strongly in front of her mother and brothers, but she breaks apart one night with her father explaining that she isn't as strong as she shows to her family.
And what hurts her the most is the part where her father made a promise to her that he isn't leaving her but left just after 10 hours.
Jungkook comforted yn the way even her family couldn't.
He made the girl smile again to confess his feelings for her though she was getting aware of them.
Yn didn't reject Jungkook because she knew how it felt to get rejected by someone you love.
For Jungkook he knew this was the part of his life where getting married to the girl was the only thing he desired.
He didn't ask her to be his girlfriend because he thought it wasn't as powerful as a marriage.
When yn learns jungkook is risking his career just for her she thought she wasn't worth the hype. She rejected him. Though she always said she'll never reject anyone who will be in love with her.
But when the girl saw how much the popular models and singers were crazy for jungkook she had a bit of jealously wash over her.
But again when she was insulted by her ex-crush, the harsh words made her tumor trigger, which started happening since the day she lost her father cause she was traumatized by the sudden situation.
Jungkook made it go and kissed her losing all his control.
And the same night she takes up the same blade she has been using for years to self-harm her to seize her life.
But jungkook saved her life with just a ring.
She realized she was worth the love she was getting. She deserved to be loved and that's when she decided to let go of her vulnerable self.
Yn takes jungkook to her father's grave, it was more like she was taking permission from her father that she is finally appreciating someone of their feelings just like the way her father taught her.
Got married to jungkook
after some time she wasn't getting calls for work and that made sense when she learned why was jungkook’s mood off.
It was the day he ended his career, though his ‘true fans’ supported him he still wanted something new to start in his life. He decided that the world should know yn was his wife instead of the media labeling his marriage as a ‘forbidden affair’ by displaying their private moment
The part where yn finally opens up from where she started being unstable and had insecurities regarding her postures, body, and many more.
Jungkook began to focus on art for yn and himself.
Now lately when yn is feeling nauseous, she googles it as the most common reason that showed she could be expecting, and most of her symptoms matched, so she keeps taking pregnancy tests.
But it was always negative and she had no idea why she was having such severe headaches, though she was having it for months it didn't make sense to her.
When her brother mentions getting about treated, she had this thing inside her mind the day she lost her father, who loved her so much.
And that again triggers her tumor to the point where she faints.
Now the doctor had this theory that she has a brain tumor. But the doctor was confident that it could be stage 1 or 2 where the girl could be treated so she didn't stop the girl from leaving the hospital and her mother taught her it was just some normal headache or some stress she took when the hospital was mentioned to her that caused her to faint.
But when it was known the girl has a cancerous brain tumor with stage four that was already spreading quickly because it was untreated.
The doctor knew the girl would be able to make it sooner or later she'll die.
When she reaches home her sight was blurry she did get see jungkook.
They talk in their bedroom and then yn thanks him for healing her broken soul!
Bts’ songs healed her broken heart but this boy healed her broken soul.
She takes her last breath in his lover's arms but promises him to stay by his side always.
In the last scene, it had been years since jungkook visits his wife's grave at the same time and fleed at the same duration.
People recognize him they think the boy is suffering from pain after losing his beloved wife but they don't know that the boy is here to spend quality time with his wife.
They talk about random stuff and then yn asks him to also adopt some kids as she knew he was alone at home without her, she wanted him to also have more of a motive to live his life though he was running an art exhibit under his wife’s name yn wanted him to have kids of hers and his.
Normally a story where yn is settled with jungkook having kids and living a peaceful life would have been amazing
but to show jungkook’s love was true and wasn't just for some physical interaction needed yn to be dead.
Jungkook's love was true so he never moved on or intended to...
Yn’s love was true for Jungkook so she chose to stay instead of choosing an afterlife just like the way her father didn't choose his afterlife to stay there to listen to his kids whenever they visited him but they couldn't see him like jungkook started seeing them now.
- thank you for sharing your remarkable opinion on this story🥺💕 I can say you have read each phrase and felt it all just like I felt while writing it down, by just the way you wrote your feelings about the whole concept made my heart flutter💘✨😭
Once again thank you so much 💕💕
@@KooKieDoll Thanks for that response, and I am glad you posted your notes on the story. It shows me a bit of your writing thought process. :)
I was impressed enough with your story that I chatted to my husband about it for ages, until his eyes glazed over that is.... LOL..
You've given me a lot of food for thought.
Woah is it an essay competition 🙂🔫
@@ramyeon.97 Guilty as charged. LOL.
OMG you guys literally write another story for next ff
This Oneshot took me a month and 25 days, I have never struggled this much with any Oneshots of mine so far.
Hope you guys give it the love it deserves💝
I didn't expect it to turn like this 😭😭but also author like yns past was clearly written I also wanted to know his like his first love, his ex cuz he wasn't dating anyone at that moment but maybe in past also he being her first kiss was mentioned but was she his or not wasn't so his character his past to me was somewhat unclear
I know many people didn't like how the story ended so here’s a wattpad version of the story with the ending many people wanted. 😊❤
Link 🔗
www.wattpad.com/story/348124300?wp_page=story_details&wp_uname=KooKie_Doll&wp_originator=fHo3pBUGp7tDMeqoOtNvHJ3ibBotxinWgeBz6WXEELlTEGaBZOlTCm4phNvw9iTm8elBjlyqyoJ2r8SprA44ACMlyFvVzVK5nZzBNTn3l43Yo5FTO61hTy0Msx1u94fv
I LOVE IT I USUALLY NEVER WATCH FF THAT IS AN HOUR LONG BUT THIS ONE IS SCRUMPTIOUS
😭🫶🏻 Thank you love
I-I cried😭 first for her dad then for her....
But it sure was a tremendous love story
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This was one the best that I have read til to date.... Just superb and awesome. I love this one💜
You make me cry so much author Nim i really feel bad and pray this don't happen with any of them they seven get their loves and stay happy with healthy joyful life forever with their other half forever i can't afford to see them crying or longing for someone who is far away from them and they can't get the person i wish they get whatever they want
This was an amazing ff the ending was so tragic it was an unexpected turn....but when he said she kept her promise I thought she is alive but no she was not ......but at end he can feel her presence that was amazing....I love it...💜💜💜💜 I have saw many ff in which at end he endup being broken in this at last also he was happy because she was with him ...... he can see hee feel her even after death this is true love and eternity of love shown in this ff........amazing ff I am out of words to describe........ I am ur new subscriber.....💜💜💜
I was stuck with my projects and was really sterssed, thankyou for uploading this. Now am gonna relieve my stress
If there is anything underrated then it is this story the amount of tears i left is more then the likes u got may God bless u
This is the first time I watched this long ff❤❤ this is masterpiece ❤❤but the ending should be happy 🥹🥹 I was crying at last😭😭 when he sat near the grave of y/n💔💔
I can't describe it in words coz i m not good at words but.......this is the best heart touching story I have ever read 🖤🙌
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I didn't expect this ending , I wish if it would be a happy ending then,it could be more nice
It's just a great masterpiece ❤️❤️❤️❤️
Thank you for making my heart flutter 🫰🏻🫶🏻😭✨💝
indeed a masterpiece
btw new subscriber 💜
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Unfortunately I can't read this small font. I was really wanting to though.
I didn’t get it at last ???
She chose to stay by Jungkook’s side instead of choosing her afterlife 👀
So she died or not o didnt get it😅
I kinda have a personal question to discuss with you! 😭
Yes? 👀
@@KooKieDoll actually it's about, monetization! 🌚
@@Jerry_1mux I truly have no idea about it, because I haven't monitored by channel, I get zero benefits from any of my videos, I really have no clue how it works but maybe you request it on your PC or laptop, it's not possible in mobile.
@@KooKieDoll well, if you have only mobile then you can still apply with it. Like go to chrome then, TH-cam! Turn the desktop site then the page will show up like in pc! Then go to your channel icon, which will be on right top corner, there you will see TH-cam studio or creator studio! Once the site open, go directly to the icon of currency "💲" like this there you can apply for monetization! 🙂❤️
Do you have Instagram?? and if yes can you give the link