New IELTS Essay Topics 27: From Cam 19: Importance of Saving: Opinion Essay with Sample

Hello, this is no 27 in our recent topics series, this is from Cam 19 (fair use disclaimer below) test 4, I think. So, we have the usual sample from me, five student introductions to review, and a complete essay by one of the students which I correct and score. I will be doing this in future, inviting members of my Telegram group (IELTS 9PRO: link below) to write on a topic and then reviewing and making corrections where necessary. Feel free to join and submit your own writing. Check out my other projects below...
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