Hi Ana Tapia; My english is not perfect, but i can say: This is a good vídeo job, i love Camera direction and body language. but theres a lot plot mistakes on the trama: 1: All story fine until 1:22 2: When you notice you are on another body (in this case gender exchange) they need a exhaust Auto exploration (know what im taking about). 3: 1:55 Ok, she have the reaction of wake up on another part or place, but in that right moment he wake up on the street, with a female body, In spite of him being there, he does not know what has happened, he does not know yet that he lost everything, his secondary reaction would be to leave that place quickly; besides he grew up with great luxuries, so he should care less about the backpack, since It does not belong to him. 4. Why transform the girl with the same attitude as the guy?, he is a wastefuler of money; when someone live on street he understand the value of one dolar/peso/Euro.etc... 5. 2:51 One of the most repeated mistakes on swap bodies video, if you are female on a male body (Or someone else on another body) , why get dressed just like the other guy?, why wear the rolled-up shirt with that sweter? why not try another style?, he got a huge Wardrobe?, Diferent person, diferent styles. well in the case of he on her body is reasonable. 6: 2:51 (again) why combing like him?, why not try a new hair style?, if he/she messed up after waking up. 7: One of the biggest continuing mistakes in this history, why buying clothes? or more specific "men clothes". he have a lot clothes in the closet that he/she never use before? she did not like it? 8: 3:01 How many days have passed since the body swap? You can appreciate her completely accepted his change, 9: if he in her body, try to go directly to his apartment, surely the doorman would have walked her away a couple of times before; but there is also the fact of not being able to enter if she do not register the fingerprints and the code. 10: 3:04 How she in the body of him, knew the password of the building, since there is a unique number for each resident. she asked the doorman?, he had it written inside his wallet? Nobody knows :o Sorrry if I extended too much. so i can tell you, the creation of characters and develop them is needed before making a script, I hope the things iI wrote here will be helpfully for you in future projects. Greetings!
Hello, first of all thank you for your close analysis, this was a school project done a few years ago where I agree I did not spend enough time on character development, I agree on some of your points, while with others they do have thoughts behind. 3. My idea was for him to wake up not knowing what has happened and my way of showing this on screen was by showing his confusion, trying to figure out where he is and what he has (looking in the backpack realizing he has nothing) 4. The girl's attitude is the one of my choice as I am the one writing the script, I chose it for her to be (even though a bit cliché) willing to spend and enjoy as much the money and the luxuries she has because she doesn't know when it will all end. 5 & 6. Yes, the style could be changed but that would suit more on a same gender body exchange, here is the opposite. 7. My whole idea of buying clothes and again, just spending money, explores and puts emphasis on the idea of wealth and being materialistic, over consuming goods. You call it a mistake, I would say it's you having a different perspective of my vision when analyzing my film. 8. The whole film is during the first day after the body exchange, they explore the new things, new life that has suddenly flipped upside down, and he (in the body of her) is the first one to go back home to try and get his old life back. 9. The fact about registering the code, he knew the code because it's his house and about the guards stopping him... it's his house he knows how it works, easily hiding from them or entering through a back door, the point is that he got in, sometimes you don't necessary have to know how it got there (great example in the film Silence of the Lambs when Anthony Hopkins steals the pen - you don't know how he did it as he was arrested but he got it). 10. I know, he had it written in his wallet. Does the viewer care? I don't think so, and if he does he'll simply make it up, there are so many options for the audience to explore in their imagination - in his phone, wallet, on a paper stuck to the fridge.... Thanks again and all the best!
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seems like there could be a much larger movie / story there. would love to see the rest of it :)
Can you do the part 2 of this?
Where was this shot? Like, where is that extremely-fancy building?
is there episode two?
this person is not bad.
Thank you :)
This person sucks
Hi Ana Tapia; My english is not perfect, but i can say:
This is a good vídeo job, i love Camera direction and body language. but theres a lot plot mistakes on the trama:
1: All story fine until 1:22
2: When you notice you are on another body (in this case gender exchange) they need a exhaust Auto exploration (know what im taking about).
3: 1:55 Ok, she have the reaction of wake up on another part or place, but in that right moment he wake up on the street, with a female body, In spite of him being there, he does not know what has happened, he does not know yet that he lost everything, his secondary reaction would be to leave that place quickly; besides he grew up with great luxuries, so he should care less about the backpack, since It does not belong to him.
4. Why transform the girl with the same attitude as the guy?, he is a wastefuler of money; when someone live on street he understand the value of one dolar/peso/Euro.etc...
5. 2:51 One of the most repeated mistakes on swap bodies video, if you are female on a male body (Or someone else on another body) , why get dressed just like the other guy?, why wear the rolled-up shirt with that sweter? why not try another style?, he got a huge Wardrobe?, Diferent person, diferent styles. well in the case of he on her body is reasonable.
6: 2:51 (again) why combing like him?, why not try a new hair style?, if he/she messed up after waking up.
7: One of the biggest continuing mistakes in this history, why buying clothes? or more specific "men clothes". he have a lot clothes in the closet that he/she never use before? she did not like it?
8: 3:01 How many days have passed since the body swap? You can appreciate her completely accepted his change,
9: if he in her body, try to go directly to his apartment, surely the doorman would have walked her away a couple of times before; but there is also the fact of not being able to enter if she do not register the fingerprints and the code.
10: 3:04 How she in the body of him, knew the password of the building, since there is a unique number for each resident. she asked the doorman?, he had it written inside his wallet? Nobody knows :o
Sorrry if I extended too much. so i can tell you, the creation of characters and develop them is needed before making a script, I hope the things iI wrote here will be helpfully for you in future projects.
Greetings!
Hello, first of all thank you for your close analysis, this was a school project done a few years ago where I agree I did not spend enough time on character development, I agree on some of your points, while with others they do have thoughts behind.
3. My idea was for him to wake up not knowing what has happened and my way of showing this on screen was by showing his confusion, trying to figure out where he is and what he has (looking in the backpack realizing he has nothing)
4. The girl's attitude is the one of my choice as I am the one writing the script, I chose it for her to be (even though a bit cliché) willing to spend and enjoy as much the money and the luxuries she has because she doesn't know when it will all end.
5 & 6. Yes, the style could be changed but that would suit more on a same gender body exchange, here is the opposite.
7. My whole idea of buying clothes and again, just spending money, explores and puts emphasis on the idea of wealth and being materialistic, over consuming goods. You call it a mistake, I would say it's you having a different perspective of my vision when analyzing my film.
8. The whole film is during the first day after the body exchange, they explore the new things, new life that has suddenly flipped upside down, and he (in the body of her) is the first one to go back home to try and get his old life back.
9. The fact about registering the code, he knew the code because it's his house and about the guards stopping him... it's his house he knows how it works, easily hiding from them or entering through a back door, the point is that he got in, sometimes you don't necessary have to know how it got there (great example in the film Silence of the Lambs when Anthony Hopkins steals the pen - you don't know how he did it as he was arrested but he got it).
10. I know, he had it written in his wallet. Does the viewer care? I don't think so, and if he does he'll simply make it up, there are so many options for the audience to explore in their imagination - in his phone, wallet, on a paper stuck to the fridge....
Thanks again and all the best!
wel done thanks
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