Okay the story is very good I did enjoy it I like the plot line and the character development I like how the deviates from the actual story I also like how you brought in certain characters at different times I do wish it was a lot longer I hope you come back make a part 2 and keep up the good work
Aging them up serves no purpose. It does not enhance the story and it actually detracts from the original story. Cause it's about child soldiers. In case everybody forgot, they may call them ninjas. But they're child soldiers and at 15. In my country, you can be drafted into the militat. 17, you can win a league joined the military. So this type of boy that the authors are using. They think they're doing something good. Oh, they don't need to be that young. To me, that's just insulting the original author in the original story. Cause it's not changing Canon. No, it's taking one of the actual anchor points of the original story out of play so seriously. Why age them up? It does nothing for your story. Why do it? I'm of the opinion and people can just ignore me. I don't care, but my opinion and my critique of most of these stories are do not make changes that does not enhance your story or do anything. For your story seriously, making changes that don't actually push forward. Your narrative is just f****** slapping the original author in the face. My problem with most of these fan fictions. Because it's 90% of them is they don't hook up with an auda. He can have a harem and it can have almost every girl in the village, but they won't include hanada. They make her into a coward. They make her into a psycho stalker. That Maker into and basically manipulator and if you're not going to have a hook up with him in a Harlem situation. They don't even have a bottom any of the girls in the hair room. Don't even include her. I'll lock this story to begin with. Because I could see they weren't going to have a hook up with him. But they weren't included her in any of it. I'd rather hurt be fought in somebody in to say whoever one instead, they go through her fat and tin tan seriously. It's like they wanna rub a nauta's nose and dog s*** for some reason.
Okay the story is very good I did enjoy it I like the plot line and the character development I like how the deviates from the actual story I also like how you brought in certain characters at different times I do wish it was a lot longer I hope you come back make a part 2 and keep up the good work
Please post part 2.
Please part 2 please 🙏
Part 2 please!!!
Kids nowdays wouldn't learn if you shelter them. In my day my parent would give me the similar or greater injuri if i was the one who is guilty
The good old days I was never bad again
Can make another part of this amazing story
part 2 pls
Part 2
Someone do a What if Female Naruto was a mermaid. Part 2 please.
Part 2 ?
Fanfic name ?
What the fanfic please
Naruto the jinchuriki to Three by SNake57575
Aging them up serves no purpose. It does not enhance the story and it actually detracts from the original story. Cause it's about child soldiers. In case everybody forgot, they may call them ninjas. But they're child soldiers and at 15. In my country, you can be drafted into the militat. 17, you can win a league joined the military. So this type of boy that the authors are using. They think they're doing something good. Oh, they don't need to be that young. To me, that's just insulting the original author in the original story. Cause it's not changing Canon. No, it's taking one of the actual anchor points of the original story out of play so seriously. Why age them up? It does nothing for your story. Why do it? I'm of the opinion and people can just ignore me. I don't care, but my opinion and my critique of most of these stories are do not make changes that does not enhance your story or do anything. For your story seriously, making changes that don't actually push forward. Your narrative is just f****** slapping the original author in the face.
My problem with most of these fan fictions. Because it's 90% of them is they don't hook up with an auda. He can have a harem and it can have almost every girl in the village, but they won't include hanada. They make her into a coward. They make her into a psycho stalker. That Maker into and basically manipulator and if you're not going to have a hook up with him in a Harlem situation. They don't even have a bottom any of the girls in the hair room. Don't even include her. I'll lock this story to begin with. Because I could see they weren't going to have a hook up with him. But they weren't included her in any of it. I'd rather hurt be fought in somebody in to say whoever one instead, they go through her fat and tin tan seriously. It's like they wanna rub a nauta's nose and dog s*** for some reason.
No Hinata shipping ? 😔