pretty weak. unrealistic events and characters. Didn't really get a reason for her to betray him like that. Not all betrayals require rational thought, so OK. But overall weak. Not enough story for a two parter, and the story that was there was mostly pulled off the story ideas shelf and used raw, without adapting to the specifics of the situation and making them specific events in the lives of these characters rather than just stock ideas.
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A perfect blend of creativity and emotion, making it a truly unforgettable story.
This story captures the imagination beautifully and keeps the reader hooked until the end!
The storytelling is exceptional, with every detail adding depth and charm.
The message is so inspiring and leaves a lasting impression on anyone who reads it.
A masterpiece that combines meaningful lessons with an enjoyable narrative!
Ahh, there's nothing like a tasty story. Short & sweet. Cooked to perfection. Well done, my friend!
Thank, my friend!
pretty weak. unrealistic events and characters. Didn't really get a reason for her to betray him like that. Not all betrayals require rational thought, so OK. But overall weak. Not enough story for a two parter, and the story that was there was mostly pulled off the story ideas shelf and used raw, without adapting to the specifics of the situation and making them specific events in the lives of these characters rather than just stock ideas.
thank you for your feedback, the story is collected by me online and sometimes it is not complete, I will try to send better stories, follow me to see the change, thank you!